Talk:SMS Condor/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Sturmvogel 66 (talk · contribs) 08:59, 4 December 2013 (UTC)

I will get to this shortly.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 08:59, 4 December 2013 (UTC)


 * Specify that Geier was a sister ship.
 * Done.
 * Link sister ship, if you'd be so kind.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 16:11, 10 December 2013 (UTC)
 * Most certainly.
 * Condor was 83.9 meters (275 ft) long overall and had a beam of 12.7 m (42 ft) and a draft of 4.42 m (14.5 ft) forward. Replace the first "and" with a comma.
 * I don't think that's right - if you cut down the sentence to the basic structure, you get "Condor was 'A'...and had 'B' and 'C'." If you replace the "and" with a comma, you get "Condor was 'A', had 'B' and 'C'.", which isn't right.
 * This is the phrasing that I generally use: Kreml was 221 ft long overall, with a beam of 53 ft and a mean draft of 15 ft. It avoids the doubled "and" and reads acceptably, I think.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 16:09, 10 December 2013 (UTC)
 * Yeah, that sounds fine to me too.
 * Refine the link to steam engine to the proper type of Marine steam engine.
 * Done.
 * Add a link to boiler, QF gun, revolver cannon.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 01:13, 10 December 2013 (UTC)
 * Added. Thanks for reviewing the article, Sturm. Parsecboy (talk) 15:55, 10 December 2013 (UTC)