Talk:SMS Posen/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Xtzou ( Talk ) 14:55, 28 May 2010 (UTC)

Hi, I am reviewing this article and it quite well written. I have only a few comments:


 * Service history
 * "1912 followed a similar pattern, though the summer cruise to Norway was interrupted by the Agadir crisis" - suggest rewording so sentence doesn't start with a number
 * Fixed. Parsecboy (talk) 15:02, 28 May 2010 (UTC)


 * Battle of Jutland
 * "and straddled Indomitable several times" - is "straddled" in this context a ship term?
 * It's used frequently in this context to describe a salvo of shells falling around a ship (i.e, some on one side, some on the other). Do you have any ideas how this could be made clearer? Parsecboy (talk) 15:02, 28 May 2010 (UTC)
 * "Fired several near misses"? Buggie111 (talk) 15:21, 28 May 2010 (UTC)
 * Expedition to Finland


 * "They departed for the Åland Islands on the following morning. Åland was to be a forward operating base, from which the port of Hanko would be secured, following an assault on the capital of Helsingfors." - I think I know what you mean, but perhaps it could be clearer.
 * How does it look now? Parsecboy (talk) 15:02, 28 May 2010 (UTC)

Xtzou ( Talk ) 14:55, 28 May 2010 (UTC)
 * Looks good and I am passing the article. Xtzou ( Talk ) 15:26, 28 May 2010 (UTC)

 GA review – see WP:WIAGA for criteria

Congratulations! Xtzou ( Talk ) 15:26, 28 May 2010 (UTC)
 * 1) Is it reasonably well written?
 * A. Prose quality: Clearly and concisely written
 * B. MoS compliance: Complies with required elements of  MoS
 * 1) Is it factually accurate and verifiable?
 * A. References to sources: Reliable sources
 * B. Citation of reliable sources where necessary: Well referenced
 * C. No original research:
 * 1) Is it broad in its coverage?
 * A. Major aspects: Sets the context
 * B. Focused: Remains focused on the topic
 * 1) Is it neutral?
 * Fair representation without bias:
 * 1) Is it stable?
 * No edit wars, etc:
 * 1) Does it contain images to illustrate the topic?
 * A. Images are copyright tagged, and non-free images have fair use rationales:
 * B. Images are provided where possible and appropriate, with suitable captions:
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass or Fail: Pass!
 * 1) Is it stable?
 * No edit wars, etc:
 * 1) Does it contain images to illustrate the topic?
 * A. Images are copyright tagged, and non-free images have fair use rationales:
 * B. Images are provided where possible and appropriate, with suitable captions:
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass or Fail: Pass!
 * B. Images are provided where possible and appropriate, with suitable captions:
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass or Fail: Pass!
 * Pass or Fail: Pass!
 * Thanks for your review! Parsecboy (talk) 15:40, 28 May 2010 (UTC)