Talk:SMS Wien/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Nick-D (talk · contribs) 02:32, 28 January 2013 (UTC)

Comments
This is a very comprehensive article on a fairly obscure ship - great work. I have the following comments and suggestions:
 * "one of three Monarch-class coastal defense ship" - the 's' at the end is missing
 * Good catch.
 * "Wien and the two other Monarch-class ships made several training cruises in the Mediterranean Sea. Wien and her sisters formed " - these two sentences have basically the same first words, and can rough dates be provided for the training cruises? (eg, during the early 1900s...)
 * Good idea.
 * "and only recommissioned during the annual summer training exercises" - would 'for annual summer training exercises' work better here?
 * Yes.
 * "Wien and her sister Budapest were sent to Trieste in August" - probably best to include the year here
 * Indeed.
 * "was officially designated as coast defense ships" - bit awkward
 * I changed it to "were officially". Do you still think that it's a bit awkward? I could change designated to "considered" or "rated".
 * That works for me Nick-D (talk) 04:23, 28 January 2013 (UTC)
 * "The Austro-Hungarian government believed that the role of her navy" - 'its navy' or similar would work better
 * Yes.
 * Was the International Fleet Review in 1897?
 * Spelled out.
 * A map of the Adriatic might be a good idea given that few readers will be familiar with the port towns in the region referred to in the article (suggestion only)
 * Good idea. Add one that covers the upper Adriatic with contemporary place names.
 * Was the bombardment of Cortellazzo related to the Battle of Caporetto? The timing is right.
 * Yes, but I'm not exactly sure how since I'm not really sure where the battlefront was when it happened or even where Castellazzo is.
 * OK, something to look out for before this goes to an ACR. Nick-D (talk) 04:23, 28 January 2013 (UTC)
 * "before a more coordinated attack was made by five MAS torpedo boats and five aircraft was made" - repetition of 'was made'
 * Deleted.
 * File:Monarch-class.jpg should be PD, but is its actual source known? Nick-D (talk) 02:48, 28 January 2013 (UTC)
 * It's probably from Brassey's Naval Annual or Janes. I'll see if I can find it in either of them. Thanks for the review.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 04:07, 28 January 2013 (UTC)
 * No worries. I was surprised to see that the link to Museo Storico Navale‎ was red while reading the article, and have turned it blue. Nick-D (talk) 04:23, 28 January 2013 (UTC)

Assessment
GA review – see WP:WIAGA for criteria


 * 1) Is it reasonably well written?
 * A. Prose quality:
 * B. MoS compliance for lead, layout, words to watch, fiction, and lists:
 * 1) Is it factually accurate and verifiable?
 * A. Has an appropriate reference section:
 * B. Citation to reliable sources where necessary:
 * C. No original research:
 * 1) Is it broad in its coverage?
 * A. Major aspects:
 * B. Focused:
 * 1) Is it neutral?
 * Fair representation without bias:
 * 1) Is it stable?
 * No edit wars, etc:
 * 1) Does it contain images to illustrate the topic?
 * A. Images are tagged with their copyright status, and valid fair use rationales are provided for non-free content:
 * B. Images are provided if possible and are relevant to the topic, and have suitable captions:
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass or Fail:
 * Nick-D (talk) 04:24, 28 January 2013 (UTC)
 * 1) Is it stable?
 * No edit wars, etc:
 * 1) Does it contain images to illustrate the topic?
 * A. Images are tagged with their copyright status, and valid fair use rationales are provided for non-free content:
 * B. Images are provided if possible and are relevant to the topic, and have suitable captions:
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass or Fail:
 * Nick-D (talk) 04:24, 28 January 2013 (UTC)
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass or Fail:
 * Nick-D (talk) 04:24, 28 January 2013 (UTC)