Talk:SS Ira H. Owen/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: The Rambling Man (talk · contribs) 20:22, 6 May 2021 (UTC)

Comments That's it, on hold. The Rambling Man (Stay alert! Control the virus! Save lives!&#33;!&#33;) 16:45, 8 May 2021 (UTC)
 * "she entered service later in 1887." you already said this, so delete, and then merge what's left of the sentence with the previous one.
 * "the National Steamship Company of Chicago, on December 30, 1899. While owned by the National Steamship Company, Ira H. Owen frequently " -> "the National Steamship Company of Chicago, on December 30, 1899, for whom she frequently "
 * "what would be known" become.
 * "storm had passed, Captain Keller looked" -> "he looked"
 * "The wreck of Ira H. Owen has not been located." avoid single-sentence paragraphs.
 * "had a stroke of" link for stroke?
 * "Steam for which was provided" for which what? Maybe just delete.
 * "hull number 14" infobox says "Yard number" 14, potentially confusing mixture in jargon.
 * "in Chicago, Illinois on " comma after Illinois.
 * "Ira H. Owen was involved in her first accident" -> "The first accident..." to avoid almost carbon-copy text.
 * "two-masted schooner Belle Brown" masted is overlinked.
 * "proceeded to head for" ->" headed for"
 * "laden with iron ore, Ira" overlinked.
 * No need to link fog.
 * "Owen proceeded to head for" see above.
 * "headed for" -> "proceeded to".
 * "$10,000 worth" inflate?
 * "eventually proved that" proved or proven?
 * "December 5, 1903 with" comma after 1903.
 * "Ann Arbor No.1 decided to tow" the boat decided?
 * "and fought the fire while" -> " and the fire was fought"
 * Could link car ferry.
 * What's upbound?
 * ""for Buffalo, New York.[16" overlinked.
 * "Thomas Honner. Honner, previously" quick repeat, merge.
 * "51-52." en-dash.
 * Likewise for all other page ranges in the refs.
 * Three spaced hyphens in the Sources section should be en-dashes.


 * All done. GreatLakesShips (talk) 22:25, 8 May 2021 (UTC)
 * Ok, promoting, good work. The Rambling Man (Stay alert! Control the virus! Save lives!&#33;!&#33;) 08:03, 9 May 2021 (UTC)