Talk:S by Shakira/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Prism (talk · contribs) 18:22, 25 December 2013 (UTC)

Gift nº 3. :) Prism   △  18:22, 25 December 2013 (UTC)
 * Dude you're on a roll --WonderBoy1998 (talk) 18:43, 25 December 2013 (UTC)


 * General
 * Disambiguation links: Not present.
 * Checklinks: Correct these external links.
 * Corrected. --WonderBoy1998 (talk) 18:43, 25 December 2013 (UTC)

1. Lead
 * Original research: Not present.
 * In depth
 * I don't understand this sentence: "Along with the original perfume, S by Shakira Eau Florale was promoted by Shakira at a press release in Paris, France, in March 2013." What does this really mean? They were both promoted in the same press release?
 * I made it simpler to read now --WonderBoy1998 (talk) 18:43, 25 December 2013 (UTC)

2. Development 2.2. Scent and packaging
 * Remove quotation marks from blockquote and insert a dot in the end of it
 * Removed. --WonderBoy1998 (talk) 18:43, 25 December 2013 (UTC)

3. Release
 * "was available for purchase in more than 15,000 stores" → unclear. Worldwide?
 * I added the US part. --WonderBoy1998 (talk) 18:43, 25 December 2013 (UTC)

4. Flanker fragrances 4.1. S by Shakira Eau Florale 4.1.1. Background and scent
 * "packing" → packaging, no?
 * Whoops! --WonderBoy1998 (talk) 18:43, 25 December 2013 (UTC)

Well, this will be even faster than the previous reviews. A very nice read! Prism  △  18:22, 25 December 2013 (UTC)
 * Final comments
 * I can't thank you enough! You have cleared out so many of my pending reviews! I am drowning in debt! THANK YOU SO MUCH! --WonderBoy1998 (talk) 18:43, 25 December 2013 (UTC)