Talk:Sable Communications of California v. FCC

Wikipedia Ambassador Program assignment
This article is the subject of an educational assignment at Michigan State University supported by WikiProject United States Public Policy and the Wikipedia Ambassador Program&#32;during the 2011 Spring term. Further details are available on the course page.

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Feedback
Great job so far. I'm not sure if you noticed, but your page is in the "what's hot" section on the USPPI leaderboard at the moment. Looking forward to the lab today, should be productive.

Some suggestions:

1) I would like to see some interaction with you online mentor on this discussion page.

2) Please refer to the court case directly as often as possible. The language is pretty approachable, so it shouldn't be too difficult to really get some important details in the article.

3) Make sure to include sections on "obscenity" and "indecency." A quick discussion of the Miller Test would also be useful.

Let me know if you have any questions. Jaobar (talk) 16:29, 31 March 2011 (UTC)

Suggestions.
Greetings, everyone! I deeply apologize for not posting here sooner; I misunderstood what I was supposed to be doing, but Jaobar has made things a little clearer.

Looking over the article at this time, it is off to a good start, but from looking at its current content, I can see a few things which could be improved:


 * The article could be wikified, with the addition of more internal links throughout.
 * The article should be added to at least one category; I would suggest looking at existing articles on individual court cases in the United States, to get an idea of what categories it would best fit into.
 * (This one might not need fixing) I think the words in the cited sources which are all in capital font could be rewritten in normal form, but this may be unnecessary; I'm not sure.

Overall, I second Jaobar's statement that this article has much potential! Wilhelmina Will (talk) 04:32, 1 April 2011 (UTC)

History section
Looks good, but I suggest that commas be added in the following instances: "...anyone under 18 or who had not given consent.", "...between 9:00 p.m. and 8:00 a.m. and receive payment...", and "...in 1985 the FCC began...". After the times and numbers given in these instances, per the manual of style for prose, a comma should be placed. Also, if there are any names, words or titles which could be relevantly linked, it might be good to do so. Wilhelmina Will (talk) 20:52, 21 April 2011 (UTC)