Talk:Saiza Nabarawi

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Instead of saying "she was born (name)" you might want to say "she was born under the name of (name)." If you have the information, I would include her reasons for being adopted. Did her parents die? Were they unfit to take care of child? When you reference her foster mother, is that her "distant relative" who adopted her or someone else? When you say that Shaarawi took an interest in her, do you mean as a caretaker or as something else? Is there something that piqued Shaarawi's interest about her? Not sure what you mean by this: "She also wrote about her exclusion from the third convocation of parliament in March 1925 in her article 'Double Standard'." Perhaps include more information on what this third convocation of parliament is/was. Your last paragraph looks great! Nice job overall. Oboewankenobie (talk) 19:48, 6 October 2014 (UTC)oboewankenobie (Katie Stawiasz, 10/6/14)

Hey, Ciara! Things are looking good. I realize that there isn't a ton of information on your author, so what you have is great. My only suggestion is to put more hyperlinks in. That should really make it "stick." Nice job! Oboewankenobie (talk) 14:41, 15 October 2014 (UTC)oboewankenobie