Talk:Sakura (Tsubasa: Reservoir Chronicle)/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Johanna (talk · contribs) 19:42, 7 September 2015 (UTC)

Second on my "to review" list. Johanna (formerly BenLinus1214)talk to me!see my work 19:42, 7 September 2015 (UTC)


 * Thanks. I'll give my best.Tintor2 (talk) 22:39, 7 September 2015 (UTC)

Comments


 * Infobox and Lead
 * Instead of putting her two appearances on different lines, put "Tsubasa: Reservoir Chronicle and xxxHolic character" as it is in the article Frasier Crane, Addison Montgomery, and other characters who appear in multiple series.
 * Be sure the lead follows the structure of the article (i.e. earlier sections come first in the lead). If you find that that doesn't make sense, change the section layout instead.
 * Are there two characters named Sayoran in two different mangas? If so, specify this.


 * Creation and conception
 * "the characters of Osamu Tezuka" upon first reading, it appears that Osamu Tezuka is a character to those of us who don't know any better. :) I would replace it with "the characters created by Osamu Tezuka"
 * Also, how are they similar to each other? Is this sourced?
 * What's an OVA?
 * "Makino pointed…" Do you mean "pointed out"?


 * Character outline
 * Why exactly are the chapter titles in French?
 * Just a question: why is there a big jump in references between chapters 32 and 145?
 * How did Fei-Wang die exactly?
 * Does the anime series make any changes to her storyline?


 * Reception
 * It should probably be "popular among readers" not "within"
 * Who was she second to in the first poll? In the second poll, what rank was she and who was she behind?
 * I might place this rankings stuff at the end of the section, as this is more typical.
 * "Megan Lavey initially called" Could you elaborate a bit on her opinions? It's a bit unclear what she was getting at right now.


 * References
 * Refs 44 and 50 are dead.

Nice article and nice writing! I was expecting to have a lot of comments on the plot summary, but it was quite well written! Clear this up and you'll be set to go. :) Johanna (formerly BenLinus1214)talk to me!see my work 02:49, 10 September 2015 (UTC)

I've done some work and: Tintor2 (talk) 14:59, 10 September 2015 (UTC)
 * I moved the creation section per WP:Lead.
 * Is it okay to write "pointed out."? I mean it's a phrasal verb.
 * I would add the original Syaoran in the lead but the character is introduced in the second half of the series.
 * Found an archive ref 50. I don't know which one is ref 44 after moving the article's lead.
 * The anime doesn't go anywhere and is followed by the original video animations
 * The manga in both Japanese and English uses the word Chapitre.
 * The old ref 44 is now ref 56 (animage). Other than that, I can definitely pass. Johanna (formerly BenLinus1214)talk to me!see my work 16:25, 10 September 2015 (UTC)
 * Never mind, I found an archive-url quickly. Pass. Johanna (formerly BenLinus1214)talk to me!see my work 16:28, 10 September 2015 (UTC)
 * GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)


 * 1) It is reasonably well written.
 * a (prose, no copyvios, spelling and grammar): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
 * 1) It is factually accurate and verifiable.
 * a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources):  c (OR):
 * 1) It is broad in its coverage.
 * a (major aspects): b (focused):
 * 1) It follows the neutral point of view policy.
 * Fair representation without bias:
 * 1) It is stable.
 * No edit wars, etc.:
 * 1) It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
 * a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail:
 * 1) It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
 * a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail:
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail:


 * Thanks.Tintor2 (talk) 16:28, 10 September 2015 (UTC)