Talk:Sakura Wars 3/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Courcelles (talk · contribs) 16:32, 2 May 2018 (UTC)

Opening for review. Courcelles (talk) 16:32, 2 May 2018 (UTC)


 * "Defined as a "dramatic adventure" game," Defined by whom?
 * Clarified.
 * "Ichiro Ogami arrive in Paris to join the newly formed Paris Assault Force and train "Paris Division", an all-female unit established by Paris' government dedicated to fighting supernatural threats against the city while maintaining their cover as a cabaret act." Is there a way to rephrase not to say "Paris" four times in one sentence?  Also, that's just a VERY long sentence in general.
 * Done my best with this.
 * "—, " Just the emdash will do,l no comma, no space.
 * Simplified this.
 * What is Les Chatte Noir? I mean literally, the black cat, but I've never heard of it, nor would define Montmarte this way.
 * I've explained what it is further down, following the modification inspired by your above observation.
 * "During the adventure segments, Ogami navigates Montmartre and the Le Chatte Noir from his apartment." Presumably you mean "starting from his apartment"?
 * Yep. Thanks for spotting that.
 * " to adjust to intensity of a single answer" To adjust to intensity? Check your wording.
 * I meant "the". Thanks for the catch.
 * " Paris Division fight monsters" fights monsters.
 * Sorted.
 * Unusual place to bring in the first mention of the "Flower Division" Who are they?
 * It's not the first mention. They're introduced in section's first paragraph.
 * "raise a character's Motivation," Raises.
 * Corrected.
 * "Sakura Wars 3 opens with Imperial Army Lieutenant" Don't pipe that link, let it specify Japanese directly.
 * Done.
 * You know what, you could answer at least four of these concerns simply by moving Synopsis above Gameplay. A lot of my answers are down here.
 * I'm a little uncertain about this, but alright I've moved it.
 * "A major theme of the game was talking with people" Is, as the game still exists.
 * Sorted.
 * Was it ever released outside Japan?
 * No. Clarified in the text.

Courcelles (talk) 16:58, 2 May 2018 (UTC)
 * I've done my best to address all your concerns. --ProtoDrake (talk) 21:00, 2 May 2018 (UTC)
 * Re-reading. Courcelles (talk) 21:03, 2 May 2018 (UTC)
 * Looks good. Promoting. Courcelles (talk) 21:08, 2 May 2018 (UTC)