Talk:Sally Kellerman/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: The Rambling Man (talk · contribs) 12:54, 19 March 2014 (UTC)

Comments Stopping the review here. Plenty to do, suggest a copyedit, perhaps WP:LOCE? Feels like this is a long way from GA standard I'm afraid. Failing it for the time being. The Rambling Man (talk) 21:52, 22 March 2014 (UTC)
 * Lead is far too short, see WP:LEAD to see what's expected, a summary of the whole article, not just a sprinkling of words to say she was an actress in MASH.
 * Four WP:DAB links need fixing.
 * "for an Oscar for" Oscar is non-encyclopedic.
 * "Kellerman, 1965" is not an adequate image caption.
 * "Sally Claire Kellerman was born in " no need for the full name, nor the bold.
 * "She attended Hollywood High School, but, after a year at" comma overdose.
 * "Within a year, she performed in a production.." new para so typically, as a minimum, "... Kellerman performed..."
 * "continued to work with Altman in Brewster McCloud " you mean she worked with him again in another production?
 * "guarian" typo.
 * "Welcome to LA." -> "Welcome to L.A."
 * "in the The Player. " fix.
 * "of Harper's Bazaar" should be in italics.
 * "Other notable work in the 1970's can be seen in Dick Richards' Rafferty and the Gold Dust Twins (1975)." 1970s, and who says this?