Talk:Sampson Mathews/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Hog Farm (talk · contribs) 04:34, 16 April 2020 (UTC)

Criteria
1. Prose ✅

2. Verifiability ✅

3. Depth of Coverage ✅

4. Neutral ✅

5. Stable ✅

6. Illustrations ✅

7. Miscellaneous ✅

Comments
1.
 * "where he and brother George Mathews" --> "where he and his brother George Mathews"
 * done Newtack101 (talk) 19:34, 16 April 2020 (UTC)
 * You never actually name the American Revolution in the lead, just stating "wartime". It would be best to go ahead and name the Revolution, as not all readers are going to have the background knowledge to identify what the conflict was based on the years it occurred in.
 * done Newtack101 (talk) 19:34, 16 April 2020 (UTC)
 * "Virginia State Senate from Augusta, Rockingham, Rockbridge, Shenandoah, and Pendleton counties" - Would it make more sense to piped link it as "Virginia State Senator" for grammatical reasons, or is the other version a convention in the specific infobox?
 * I think you're right. Senator would seem to be the convention. Newtack101 (talk) 17:40, 16 April 2020 (UTC)
 * "He additional was appointed a justice of the peace" This is ungrammatical, there's several ways it can be rephrased
 * done Newtack101 (talk) 19:34, 16 April 2020 (UTC)
 * Wikilink misdemeanors
 * done Newtack101 (talk) 19:34, 16 April 2020 (UTC)
 * "killed Shawnee Chief Cornstalk without case" - What does "without case" mean? Is it a typo for cause?
 * Yes, just a typo for cause. fixed
 * " Further, they believed the colonists may well be able to restore friendly relations with the Indians if they were able to capture Fort Detroit from the British" - Shift of tense in the middle of this
 * done Newtack101 (talk) 19:34, 16 April 2020 (UTC)
 * " in May, 1778" - Is the comma necessary?
 * done Newtack101 (talk) 19:34, 16 April 2020 (UTC)
 * Wiklink the ranks in the military service section
 * done Newtack101 (talk) 19:34, 16 April 2020 (UTC)
 * Wikilink Yorktown
 * done Newtack101 (talk) 19:34, 16 April 2020 (UTC)
 * Thomas Posey is a duplink
 * done

addressed all issues in this section. Newtack101 (talk) 19:34, 16 April 2020 (UTC)

2.
 * ""spelling books, silk, hats, silver, and even tailor-made suits,"" This is phrased as a quote but isn't the exact quote
 * thanks, corrected Newtack101 (talk) 19:25, 16 April 2020 (UTC)
 * For the ref concerning the quote above, it's better to link to the exact document than the page you have to navigate through to get to the article.
 * doneNewtack101 (talk) 19:25, 16 April 2020 (UTC)
 * "October 10, 1774, The Battle of Point Pleasant was fought between the Virginia militia and Indians from the Shawnee and Mingo tribes along the Ohio River, with the militia emerging victorious." - Citation needed
 * done Newtack101 (talk) 22:15, 16 April 2020 (UTC)
 * "The months following the Dunmore's War saw tension rise between the British and the colonies. Lord Dunmore dissolved the House of Burgesses in May 1774. This lead the Burgesses to form the extralegal Virginia Convention." - Citation needed
 * done Newtack101 (talk) 22:04, 16 April 2020 (UTC)
 * "Mathews was elected to the Virginia State Senate for the inaugural session of the Virginia General Assembly, the successor to the House of Burgesses. He represented Augusta, Rockingham, Rockbridge, Shenandoah, and Pendleton counties.[21]" - This gives the impression that he represented all of these countries during that first session, but he didn't represent Pendleton until 1790, which was 10 years removed from the rest of his terms.
 * Right. I've clarified for accuracy, which involved a bit of rearranging, changing Personal Life to Later Life. Newtack101 (talk) 22:15, 16 April 2020 (UTC)
 * " Arnold evacuated Portsmouth by sea.[citation needed]" - Citation needed
 * just decided to remove this sentence, and added an sentence about the Mathews expedition ending instead. Newtack101 (talk) 00:34, 17 April 2020 (UTC)
 * "#Grigsby 1890(2), p. 88" - The hashtag appears in front of a lot of the Grigsby reference, I don't believe it should be there.
 * you're right, that was a mistake. done Newtack101 (talk) 19:25, 16 April 2020 (UTC)
 * " Clem, Gladys B. (1965)"It Happened Around Staunton in Virginia"(Staunton, Virginia: Second Edition) p. 21-23" - Is there a way to insert a space between (1965) and "It Happened ..." ?
 * done Newtack101 (talk) 19:25, 16 April 2020 (UTC)
 * The page ranges should have endashes, not the short dashes.
 * done Newtack101 (talk) 19:25, 16 April 2020 (UTC)
 * Is ref 1 a book or an article? If it's a book, add an ISBN if one exists, if it's an article, add where it was published in
 * yes it's a book, but an obscure one. I haven't been able to find an ISBN number, but have added an OCLC
 * The book name in ref 8 needs italicized, and a location should be added if one is available.
 * done Newtack101 (talk) 19:25, 16 April 2020 (UTC)
 * Refs 12, 13, and 14 need accessdate parameters.
 * Ref 16 needs an accessdate
 * Ref 21 needs an accessdate
 * The publisher for the Founders Online refs should be the National Archives, not the United States government
 * thanks, done Newtack101 (talk) 19:25, 16 April 2020 (UTC)
 * Refs 28, 30, 31, 33, and 34 need accessdates.
 * "Chalkley3, p. 149" - Why the 3? There's no indication of multiple volumes in the Chalkey refs
 * no reason for the 3. removed Newtack101 (talk) 19:25, 16 April 2020 (UTC)
 * Ref 43 needs an accessdate
 * I've gone ahead and filled in all blank access dates with today's date. I'm guess/hoping that will suffice! Newtack101 (talk) 19:25, 16 April 2020 (UTC)
 * The refs in the bibliography need to be alphabetized
 * done Newtack101 (talk) 19:25, 16 April 2020 (UTC)
 * "Henning, William W. (180)" - Looks like you're missing a digit in the year
 * thanks, done Newtack101 (talk) 19:25, 16 April 2020 (UTC)
 * " Glanville, p. 78" - This short ref is provided, but there's no long ref for Glanville in the bibliography
 * fixed Newtack101 (talk) 19:25, 16 April 2020 (UTC)
 * There's stray ref tagging after the last entry in the bibliography
 * fixed Newtack101 (talk) 19:25, 16 April 2020 (UTC)

all issues addressed Newtack101 (talk) 00:34, 17 April 2020 (UTC)

3.
 * The infobox and sources seem to indicate that Mathews was in the Virginia Senate in 1790, but this isn't mentioned Newtack101 (talk) 17:40, 16 April 2020 (UTC)in the article. It should be.
 * done. I'm not sure what to do in the infobox regarding the varying counties. Do you think I should add a new entry every year he represented a different set of counties, or leave it as is? Newtack101 (talk) 00:34, 17 April 2020 (UTC)
 * I think it would be acceptable. I'm not an expert on the infobox standards for this infobox.  If you plan on taking this forward to A-class or FAC, they might say something about that.

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Placing this one on hold now, I'll make another run through after these are addressed.

Hog Farm, thank you for your review. I have addressed everything in your initial review. If you spot any addition issues, and I'll be happy to address them. Newtack101 (talk) 00:34, 17 April 2020 (UTC)
 * I found one last thing. You have a ref to Kromkowski without any other context (43 I believe), but there's two separate refs to Kromkowski, so it's unclear which is referred to. Hog Farm (talk) 04:03, 17 April 2020 (UTC)
 * Gotcha. I went ahead and put the full Kromkowski reference in for (43). Also, just want to make sure you saw my question about the infobox above. Thanks. Newtack101 (talk) 12:29, 17 April 2020 (UTC)
 * I think that's everything. Promoting. Hog Farm (talk) 15:09, 17 April 2020 (UTC)