Talk:Sands Hotel and Casino/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Jaguar (talk · contribs) 10:40, 31 July 2015 (UTC)

Sorry for the wait. I'll finish this review today JAG  UAR   10:40, 31 July 2015 (UTC)
 * I didn't know Ocean's 11 was set here? I loved that film! JAG  UAR   11:07, 31 July 2015 (UTC)


 * The original one with the Rat Pack, not the Clooney and Pitt one!♦ Dr. Blofeld  11:13, 31 July 2015 (UTC)
 * I meant the original film, never seen the Clooney and Pitt one! It was also parodied in Deep Space Nine's episode Badda-Bing Badda-Bang, where Sinatra is a regular parodied character in the show! JAG  UAR   11:52, 31 July 2015 (UTC)

Initial comments

 * "that operated from 1952, to 1996" -no need for comma here
 * Can't see it, did you fix it?♦ Dr. Blofeld  11:17, 31 July 2015 (UTC)
 * Looks like 97198 fixed it! JAG  UAR   11:20, 31 July 2015 (UTC)


 * "The last dice in the casino was rolled by Bob Stupak just after 6pm on 30 June 1996" - the dates should be in American format, but I've converted them all myself if that's OK. D-m-y dates or m-d-y dates, I really don't mind!
 * Fine.


 * The lead summarises the article well, so this meets the GA criteria
 * "and shady people like Mike Shapiro, Ed Levinson, and Syd Wineman" - 'shady' is a bit unencyclopaedic, I don't know who these people are as they're all red links and their job titles are unclear - were they from the mobsters etc?
 * they were illegal bookmakers, I'll change.


 * "and Ray Sinatra and his Orchestra were the initial house band" - orchestra doesn't need to be capitalised here
 * Yes, it's the norm in jazz to do that


 * "His share, variously described as from 2 to 9 %" - 2%
 * It's redundant to say it again though. "From 2 to 9 %" is fine I think.


 * "Fuming, Sinatra began what The Los Angeles Times describes" - furious?
 * Fuming fits better I think.


 * "It culminated in Sinatra reportedly drove a golf cart" - wrong tense, should be It culminated when Sinatra
 * OK.


 * "Hughes stated that he intended to expand Sands into a 4000-room resort, but his plans came to nothing" - might read better as but his plans did not materialize
 * Yes, good idea.


 * "It became the largest AAA Five-Diamond landmark in North America" - I'd link AAA diamond for reference
 * Done.


 * "knowing that if he scolded Sinatra and asked him to pay damages he'd not perform at Sands again" - informal, he would
 * Done.

Blame Rosie haha!
 * " with nightly acts starting at 5:00 PM and running until 6:00 AM" - pm and am aren't capitalised elsewhere in the article?

Addressed most of them. Thanks for reviewing it!♦ Dr. Blofeld  12:13, 31 July 2015 (UTC)

On hold
This is a very well researched and well written article, I enjoyed reading it! Sinatra sounded like he owned the place! I have been watching the progress with the article over the past week and am impressed with how comprehensive it has become. I'll leave this on hold until everything is clarified  JAG  UAR   11:49, 31 July 2015 (UTC)


 * It's a cool place! Recommend listening to this!♦ Dr. Blofeld  12:14, 31 July 2015 (UTC)


 * Comment For a few years, Sinatra did own the place--at least a small bit of it. The business had a system by which stars received "points" (a percentage of ownership) for performing there on a regular basis.  This is how Sinatra's share in the Sands went from 2 to 9 percent--contracting to do regular appearances there.  The law ordered him to sell the shares of it in 1963 because he was associated with mobster Sam Giancana.  If Sinatra had gone on his tear a few years earlier, he could at least have claimed he was destroying his own property. :) We hope (talk) 12:42, 31 July 2015 (UTC)
 * It would have been funny if he would have damaged his own property LOL! I've saved that playlist to my favourites so hopefully I can have that playing in the background while I edit. Anyway, this article meets the GA criteria now so I'll be promoting, well done!  JAG  UAR   20:41, 31 July 2015 (UTC)