Talk:Santa Catalina School

Hello! I'm a student at Georgetown who is working with the WikiProject United States Public Policy and I'll be working on modifying this article soon. You can check out what I've done so far at User:Okeland/Sandbox. —Preceding undated comment added 18:07, 5 November 2010 (UTC).

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Can we get a source for the Patty Hearst expulsion? I remember reading it somewhere, if only I could recall where exactly... --Seja430 03:10, 26 February 2006 (UTC)

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More will be required to avoid deletion. Patty Hearst link is important. e.g. an infobox Victuallers 11:38, 2 June 2007 (UTC)

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The result of the move request was: page moved. Vegaswikian (talk) 22:13, 22 March 2010 (UTC)

Santa Catalina School for Girls → Santa Catalina School — Santa Catalina School is not only for girls. Our Lower School has boys and girls. We have never been known as "Santa Catalina School for Girls." "Santa Catalina School" is currently redirecting to "Santa Catalina School for Girls." Please correct. Santacatalinaschool (talk) 23:09, 15 March 2010 (UTC)
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You have a great article so far!

1. Great chart on your topic page! It's very in-depth and provides very quick information.

2. Amazing history. That too is also in depth. You use your sources really well!

Also, to think about:

1. Some of your information in your lead would be better suited for the main article. The lead gives basic information (similar to your chart).

2. You could expand a couple of your headings. For example, in your "history" section, you have a title about "Ranch beginnings". but only one sentence. If you could expand that, it would be great.

Your grammar is pretty consistent and neutral, but there are a couple of places where your adverbs are not-as-neutral. I'll go through and make a couple of changes.

Wvhoya (talk) 20:22, 18 November 2010 (UTC)

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Impressive addition of material here. Great job organizing it all. Good charts, etc., make it clear and easy to read. Wvhoya seems right on target with his comments too. I trolled the history page but could not figure out why the "notable" alumni was removed. Any chance that could go back in -- it seems relevant. And when others come to edit it, they will likely make sure the Patty Hearst stuff is in there. In terms of sources, I'd like to see you use some material from newspapers, etc. -- try Google news and Lexis-Nexis and you'll come up with some historical material that may be relevant. Radavis147 (talk) 17:25, 24 November 2010 (UTC)