Talk:Sarah Bryant (Virtua Fighter)/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Cukie Gherkin (talk · contribs) 00:48, 23 May 2023 (UTC)

GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)

(Criteria marked are unassessed)
 * 1) It is reasonably well written.
 * a. (prose, spelling, and grammar):
 * b. (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
 * 1) It is factually accurate and verifiable.
 * a. (reference section):
 * b. (citations to reliable sources):
 * c. (OR):
 * d. (copyvio and plagiarism):
 * 1) It is broad in its coverage.
 * a. (major aspects):
 * b. (focused):
 * 1) It follows the neutral point of view policy.
 * Fair representation without bias:
 * 1) It is stable.
 * No edit wars, etc.:
 * 1) It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
 * a. (images are tagged and non-free content have non-free use rationales):
 * b. (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/fail:
 * 1) It is broad in its coverage.
 * a. (major aspects):
 * b. (focused):
 * 1) It follows the neutral point of view policy.
 * Fair representation without bias:
 * 1) It is stable.
 * No edit wars, etc.:
 * 1) It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
 * a. (images are tagged and non-free content have non-free use rationales):
 * b. (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/fail:
 * No edit wars, etc.:
 * 1) It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
 * a. (images are tagged and non-free content have non-free use rationales):
 * b. (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/fail:
 * b. (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/fail:
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/fail:
 * Pass/fail:

Infobox


 * 1) Voice talent should be mentioned in the article in some way if possible
 * 2) Her fighting style is not mentioned in the article, and her location is only mentioned in the lead and infobox
 * 3) Fixed

Lead

Conception and design
 * 1) Should mention Yu Suzuki's role as the creator
 * 2) Fixed


 * 1) It says Suzuki wouldn't comment on whether she's based on a real person; is the article saying he wouldn't comment on whether she's based on a real human being? It sounds like the article is referring to Sarah Conner as a real person.
 * 2) Fixed
 * 3) Consider paraphrasing the quotes a bit more (mainly the Suzuki quote)
 * 4) Fixed
 * 5) "While she has had a wide variety of secondary outfits as the series progressed, her main design has been used through the series and in promotional material, only seeing minimal change through the years." - Unsourced
 * 6) Fixed

In other media

Reception
 * 1) I assume the "tongue-in-cheek" mention comes from the source?
 * 2) Fixed to be clearer that that comes from the source.


 * 1) I feel like "Official Sega Saturn Magazine described her as "one of the most brilliant creations in the world of video games", praising her as a "brainwashed maniac" but further emphasizing their like of her breast size, comparing them to Lara Croft's and describing Sarah's as "larger and better defined"." could be improved. For example: "Official Sega Saturn Magazine described her as "one of the most brilliant creations in the world of video games", praising the brainwashing plot and her breast size." I don't think it's really important that they're bigger than Lara's, y'know? Just means that he likes bigger tiddy.
 * 2) Yeah I think I was leaning too heavily into the Croft comparison due to the time it was posted. Should be a lot better now.
 * 3) "true original; until Max Headroom becomes a polygon fighter, she'll be the oldest popular character of her type." Not sure what this means!
 * 4) Dug up the issue and paraphrased it better to make the comparison clearer between her and later characters.

Image


 * 1) Image looks a bit poopy
 * 2) Fair use rationale for the infobox image is invalid
 * 3) Fixed and fixed.