Talk:Sargonid dynasty/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Sainsf (talk · contribs) 18:28, 20 April 2020 (UTC)

Lovely article :) I will post my comments soon. Sainsf  (talk · contribs) 18:28, 20 April 2020 (UTC)


 * No copyvio concerns, no dablinks, no broken external links
 * Duplinks: Urartu, Judah, Levant, Ashurbanipal, Elam, Ashur, Naqi'a (make sure these are linked only at their first mention)
 * Fixed duplinks, some later sections were finished before earlier ones were so just forgot to check for duplinks before. Ichthyovenator (talk) 13:07, 24 April 2020 (UTC)


 * Sourcing looks excellent, particularly impressed by the citations.
 * Good good, thanks :) Ichthyovenator (talk) 13:08, 24 April 2020 (UTC)

All in all beautifully well-written and comprehensive. Thanks for this pleasant read :) A few comments: Sainsf  (talk · contribs) 11:17, 22 April 2020 (UTC)
 * Comments on prose and coverage:
 * Many thanks! I really like the stories of the Sargonid kings, so hopefully this article serves as a decent enough overview :) Ichthyovenator (talk) 14:32, 24 April 2020 (UTC)


 * The lead should only have facts from the main text nothing new, and citations should be absent from it unless the claim is too controversial
 * Yeah, true. The cited info in the lede was just kind of awkward to fit in elsewhere in the article. I added it as the last paragraph of the "Rulers of the Sargonid dynasty" section and removed citations in the lead. Ichthyovenator (talk) 14:32, 24 April 2020 (UTC)


 * nearly two thousand-year history two millenia would sound better
 * Agreed, changed. Ichthyovenator (talk) 14:32, 24 April 2020 (UTC)


 * Say either Sargon or Sargon II consistently
 * Changed all instances of "Sargon" to "Sargon II" (except some places where Sargon needs to appear without the number). Ichthyovenator (talk) 14:32, 24 April 2020 (UTC)


 * The timeline looks great but the placement makes it appear somewhat sandwiched. Personal opinion.
 * Agreed, moved it to its own section at the bottom. Ichthyovenator (talk) 14:32, 24 April 2020 (UTC)


 * Typically numbers like 'nearly thirty thousand' should be in digits. Check for other instances
 * Changed to digits. Ichthyovenator (talk) 14:50, 24 April 2020 (UTC)


 * (meaning "Sargon's fortress) quotes
 * Oops, fixed. Ichthyovenator (talk) 14:50, 24 April 2020 (UTC)


 * Stick to saying BC wherever years are mentioned (670s can be excluded but '670s BC' is mentioned later so consistency is needed)
 * Added BC to all years (and to the first 670s). Ichthyovenator (talk) 14:50, 24 April 2020 (UTC)


 * Say either Arda-Mulissu or Arda-Mulissi
 * Both are fine translations of his Akkadian name, but yes it should be consistent. Went with Arda-Mulissu since that's the title of his article and seems to be more common. Ichthyovenator (talk) 14:50, 24 April 2020 (UTC)


 * Captions that are not full sentences should not end with a period
 * Which captions would these be (almost all of them I assume)?
 * Yes, save for a few like the Ashurbanipal pic as the last line is a proper sentence. Sainsf  (talk · contribs) 16:36, 24 April 2020 (UTC)
 * Alright, removed periods but I'm a bit uncertain so you'll have to check them. Ichthyovenator (talk) 17:35, 24 April 2020 (UTC)
 * Nice work, all done neatly :) Nevertheless, if you are confused take a look at WP:CAPFRAG. Sainsf  (talk · contribs) 18:00, 24 April 2020 (UTC)

Okay then, all set for promotion :) Great job. Sainsf  (talk · contribs) 18:00, 24 April 2020 (UTC)
 * Thank you for taking the time to look through the article! :) Ichthyovenator (talk) 15:06, 25 April 2020 (UTC)