Talk:Sauron/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: BennyOnTheLoose (talk · contribs) 19:53, 2 July 2020 (UTC)

Fictional history

 * wikilink "Vala", "Quenya"
 * Done.


 * "breaking the cosmic Music with discord" - could do with a bit of explanation.
 * Glossed.


 * "which Sauron followed" - followed chronologically, or in the sense of "acted according to"?
 * "continued".


 * "Downfall" isn't a word used in the previous section consider renaming that section "Downfall of Númenor" or decapitalising it in the text.
 * Fixed.


 * "Gollum's friend.." should this be "Sméagol's friend.."? I don't think he was called Gollum at that time. If this is changed, then there should be a mention that he was later known as Gollum, as that name occurs a few times in the article.
 * Quite right. Done.

Appearance

 * Suggest adding a word or to to introduce Gorlim.
 * Glossed.


 * "who has daunting eyes" - I think should be "who had daunting eyes"
 * Done.


 * "This raises the question of whether an "Eye" was Sauron's actual manifestation," - is that within "The Black Gate is Closed"?
 * No it's Christopher Tolkien. Repeated ref for clarity.

Concept and creation

 * "probably of the Eldar elves" is missing a citation. (Unless already supported by the Auden source.)
 * Removed.


 * "Other critics came closer to the mark;" - only one is mentioned, either reword or mention another. (Unless already supported by the Auden source.)
 * Reworded.


 * "1967" - publication was June 1968, but the conjecture may well be from 1967. Just noting this in case there is a typo in a year.
 * Fixed.

Interpretations

 * Looks fine.
 * Noted.

Adaptations

 * "portrayed as a humanoid creature ... in Ralph Bakshi's 1978 animated version" needs a source.
 * Fixed.


 * I had my doubts about cedmagic as a source but after looking at the author page, I think it's acceptable.
 * Noted.


 * The Telegraph source doesn't support all the titles listed for video games.
 * Added ref.

In culture

 * Looks fine.
 * Noted.

Infobox and Lead

 * Both look fine.
 * Noted.

Images

 * No issues.
 * Noted.

Copyvio and plagiarism check

 * Checked all matches above 4% on Earwig's Copyvio Detector. No concerns.
 * Noted.

Happy to discuss, or be challenged on, any of my review comments. Regards, BennyOnTheLoose (talk) 19:53, 2 July 2020 (UTC)
 * Thanks for all your work on the article . I find the article to be comprehensive, balanced, well-structured and well-written. I've listed some points for consideration above. Regards, BennyOnTheLoose (talk) 21:20, 2 July 2020 (UTC)
 * Many thanks! Chiswick Chap (talk) 07:57, 3 July 2020 (UTC)
 * Thanks for your responses, . I'm happy to pass the article for GA. Regards, BennyOnTheLoose (talk) 20:51, 3 July 2020 (UTC)