Talk:Saved from the Titanic/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Moswento (talk · contribs) 14:03, 8 March 2013 (UTC)


 * I'll review this one. Depending on my weekend schedule, I may not get round to it before next week, but I very much look forward to the experience when I get there. Lost films are fascinating. Moswento talky 14:03, 8 March 2013 (UTC)
 * Thanks, I'll look forward to seeing what you have to say about it. :-) Prioryman (talk) 22:34, 8 March 2013 (UTC)

Firstly, great work! I thoroughly enjoyed reviewing this article - as well as being well-written, every aspect of this film and its history is fascinating. Overall, it's so close to GA status, I can almost taste it. Specifically:
 * Scope - There's nothing major that's missing. I think it loses focus once or twice in terms of going into too much detail about Dorothy's life - see comments below.
 * Prose - Mostly of very good quality, just a few (minor) comments and queries below. No evidence of plagiarism, bias etc.
 * Images - These all check out. I love the Gibson publicity photo!
 * References - No problems here. Everything looks reliable. I don't have access to all of them, but I'm happy to assume good faith on the basis of what I can see.
 * What all this means in a nutshell is - If you could respond to my comments below, I would very happily promote this to GA. Good work! Moswento talky 13:34, 11 March 2013 (UTC)

Good stuff! Thanks for your replies to my review - I'm now very happy to promote this to GA status. Congratulations and keep up the good work! Moswento talky 16:10, 13 March 2013 (UTC)


 * Lead
 * "which stood in for Titanic." - I think this comment is redundant; we assume this is what the ship was used for
 * OK, I've trimmed it. Prioryman (talk) 00:22, 13 March 2013 (UTC)


 * "opened in the United States" - I'm wondering if the more usual "premiered" would be better than "opened"?
 * Good idea, done. Prioryman (talk) 00:22, 13 March 2013 (UTC)


 * "Gibson was subsequently involved in a scandal after she accidentally killed a man in the car of the movie producer with whom she had co-written the film and with whom she was having an affair." - this isn't necessary in the lead, and possibly not in the article at all (see below)
 * Trimmed. Prioryman (talk) 00:22, 13 March 2013 (UTC)


 * Le voyage
 * "deck beginning to list " - I'm wondering if, as this is a non-nautical topic, a non-technical alternative for "list" might be better (tilt/lean e.g.)
 * This came up during the FAC for Sinking of the RMS Titanic; consensus was that "list" was the appropriate term and that tilt/lean would not be. Prioryman (talk) 00:22, 13 March 2013 (UTC)


 * " She fetched her mother " - this confused me until I checked the source, because she was sharing a cabin with her mother. Worth clarifying that she had decided to investigate the noise
 * Done. Prioryman (talk) 00:22, 13 March 2013 (UTC)


 * Making of the film
 * Do you think "Production" would be a better title for this section?
 * Yes, that's definitely better - changed the title. Prioryman (talk) 00:22, 13 March 2013 (UTC)


 * "He had an advantage that no other studio in the world possessed – a leading actress who was a survivor and eyewitness to what had happened. " - the first part of this sentence sounds like an advert or a newspaper. Perhaps something simpler like "He had a unique advantage" would be better.
 * OK, reworded. Prioryman (talk) 00:22, 13 March 2013 (UTC)


 * "It is more likely that Brulatour persuaded her that the disaster offered an opportunity to advance her career." - "more likely" according to who? Is there a general consensus? Is this based on one person's perspective? I think this needs clarification and a footnote immediately afterwards.
 * I've attributed this. Prioryman (talk) 00:22, 13 March 2013 (UTC)


 * " derelict transport vessel" - "derelict ship"?
 * The source says explicitly that it was a derelict transport vessel, so I've stuck with that wording.


 * "that stood in for Titanic." - see my comment in the lead
 * Fate
 * Frank Thompson quote - I realise he says puts this very well, but I think this quote is too long. Any way you could summarise/paraphrase some of it, possibly just leaving the last two sentences as direct quote?
 * Done. Prioryman (talk) 00:22, 13 March 2013 (UTC)


 * "injuring his wife, who survived." - I think the "who survived" is redundant here
 * I'm not sure how much of the last paragraph is needed in this article. Readers who are interested in her life can navigate to her article; facts such as where she is buried are irrelevant to this film.
 * I've trimmed this. Prioryman (talk) 00:22, 13 March 2013 (UTC)


 * Cast-y
 * As this is a lost film, I think this section definitely needs a reference
 * Added this. Prioryman (talk) 00:22, 13 March 2013 (UTC)


 * See also
 * It would be good to explain why the first "see also" is included (e.g.", a German film about the incident produced the same year")
 * I've added a gloss which should help explain it. Prioryman (talk) 00:22, 13 March 2013 (UTC)