Talk:Sawmill Fire (2017)/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: GhostRiver (talk · contribs) 21:59, 2 September 2021 (UTC)

I'll be taking a look at this article! —  Ghost River  21:59, 2 September 2021 (UTC)

Infobox and lede

 * "and then to extinguish"
 * – ♠Vami _IV†♠  23:56, 2 September 2021 (UTC)
 * "Footage of the fire's inception was released by the U.S. Forest Service at the request of a local news agency in November 2018, resulting in its causation being mocked online." "When the U.S. Forest Service released footage of the fire's inception in November 2018 at the request of a local news agency, the cause of the Sawmill Fire was subject to online mockery."
 * ✅ I've also moved this sentence after the next one. – ♠Vami _IV†♠  23:56, 2 September 2021 (UTC)

Cause

 * To clarify, is the property owned by the state of Arizona, or by Arizona State University? If the former, as I suspect, then I would suggest saying "a state-owned property in south-central Arizona"
 * Indeed, the former is what I meant. – ♠Vami _IV†♠  00:10, 3 September 2021 (UTC)
 * "but was unable to because of the speed at which it was spreading." "but the speed at which it spread rendered his attempts unsuccessful."
 * ✅ Sorta. I changed it to "but was unsuccessful because of the speed at which it was spreading." – ♠Vami _IV†♠  00:10, 3 September 2021 (UTC)

Fire

 * "and precipitation was abnormally low for the region"
 * – ♠Vami _IV†♠  03:14, 3 September 2021 (UTC)
 * "and had been closed on April 24" "and had been closed earlier that day"
 * ✅ – ♠Vami _IV†♠  03:14, 3 September 2021 (UTC)
 * "repairs to the road, meanwhile, lasted until early May"
 * – ♠Vami _IV†♠  03:14, 3 September 2021 (UTC)
 * "Wind as high as 45 mph was expected" "Winds as high as 45 mph were expected"
 * Don't know how I missed that one. – ♠Vami _IV†♠  03:14, 3 September 2021 (UTC)
 * "by 30 April" "by April 30"
 * Whoops. – ♠Vami _IV†♠  03:14, 3 September 2021 (UTC)

Aftermath

 * WL U.S. Attorney's Office
 * – ♠Vami _IV†♠  04:16, 3 September 2021 (UTC)
 * "though the fire started on property of the State of Arizona, Federal property had been burned." "although the fire started on property of the State of Arizona, federal property had also been burned."
 * – ♠Vami _IV†♠  04:16, 3 September 2021 (UTC)
 * "and was summoned to appear"
 * – ♠Vami _IV†♠  04:16, 3 September 2021 (UTC)
 * "on 29 September" "on September 29"
 * – ♠Vami _IV†♠  04:16, 3 September 2021 (UTC)
 * "in Dickey and gender reveal parties in general" "in both Dickey and the concept of gender reveal parties"
 * ✅ – ♠Vami _IV†♠
 * I would say "the first wildfire known to be ignited by a gender reveal party"
 * – ♠Vami _IV†♠  04:16, 3 September 2021 (UTC)
 * "igniting more public outrage" "which ignited more public outrage"
 * ✅ – ♠Vami _IV†♠  04:16, 3 September 2021 (UTC)

General comments

 * No stability concerns are present in the revision history
 * One picture (map) that is in the public domain and is relevant to the article
 * Earwig score is good at 9.9%

Putting on hold now, ping me if there are any questions. —  Ghost River  23:25, 2 September 2021 (UTC)
 * Addressed the above. I've since writing the article acquired some more materials for #Aftermath about, well, the aftermath of the fire. Should I add them in now or would you like for me to refrain for now, and keep this review short? – ♠Vami _IV†♠  04:22, 3 September 2021 (UTC)
 * The article is is short enough that I wouldn't mind if you added them in and then I can take a quick look! —  Ghost River  13:35, 3 September 2021 (UTC)
 * OK, done, and all in one revision. – ♠Vami _IV†♠  03:38, 4 September 2021 (UTC)
 * All the new stuff looks great, happy to pass now! —  Ghost River  14:59, 4 September 2021 (UTC)