Talk:Scaly-breasted munia

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My evaluation of this article for Bio372
The article on the Spice Finch looks like a good start towards a decent article. It is missing a taxonomy section, as well as a culture or human relation section. The behavior section can be expanded upon and split into subgroups of mating, feeding, and survival. The article mentions that many experiments have been performed on the birds, including observing that the foraging birds may feed actively on the substrate or pick grain dropped on the ground and these strategies may be chosen according to the situation, which could be expanded upon. More specifically, the discussion of producers and scroungers could be incorporated into that section. The experiments of Kieron Mottley and Luc-Alain Giraldeau could be referenced in order to write about the predicted stable equilibrium frequency with producers and scroungers doing equally well. A model graph of how the situation appears could be included. The writing is clear and neutral. The article mentions that the bird is gregarious and doesn’t give evidence why. Looking at the Talk page, it only shows that wikiprojects that it is affiliated with. Looking at the history page, it was created in 2004 which is a lot earlier than the other articles I have looked at, but is not as high of quality as others that got started later. Once again the revisions show just a slow accumulation of minor revisions has led it to how it looks currently. Zhangt2413 (talk) 19:52, 25 September 2012 (UTC)

Edits on 10-14-12
Hi, all. Good work on the article! It looks like a lot of text has been added for the behavior section. I added a few edits related to readability and formatting. I split the block of text on feeding behaviors into smaller sections to focus on the particular concepts or behaviors described. Also, where needed, I added hyperlinks to clarify scientific terms used. Good work! GenesBrainsBehaviorNeuroscienceKL (talk) 02:56, 15 October 2012 (UTC)

Comments on article
Hi Tony, overall the article looks great! I reworded the Sociality section because the use of “sometimes” was a bit redundant. Additionally, I added a hyperlink to the communal roosting page. For Feeding-related behaviors, I added a hyperlink to Munia, but other than that it looks great! For group living tradeoffs, I changed the wording of some of the sentences to improve clarity. Overall, however, I thought this section was particularly strong. I really appreciated the way you drew on a lot of different studies to prove a really strong point. There were some minor grammatical adjustments I made to the Foraging: two models, specialized foraging sections, and evolutionary stable strategies and tactics sections. In the breeding section, I adjusted a misbehaving hyperlink. This article would benefit from additional information on taxonomy, its role in culture, and its conservation status. Samara levine (talk) 23:29, 16 October 2012 (UTC)

Evaluation
For this article, I made some slight alterations to the writing style, editing for clarity proper grammar. I corrected some run-on sentences and added some missing words. Some sentences were improperly structured and difficult to read, so I corrected these. I also fixed some of the headings, and indicated some places where a citation might be necessary.

In regards to behavior, I was wondering what significance tail flicking has. If it is significant to their behavior, I would suggest more elaboration on the subject. While reading it over I just changed some grammar and altered a couple sentences to improve the flow. I would also suggest adding more information about the bird that isn't behavior. This could give the article greater relevance to the reader. Great article

Jeremy.winkler (talk) 21:59, 20 November 2012 (UTC)

--Cobiorower (talk) 01:46, 17 October 2012 (UTC) cobiorower

This is a great overall article. I feel that you cover the material pretty in-depth.

Nice job with the article! You clearly did a ton of research and discusses a lot of interesting Munia behavior. For my peer review I really did not do much--I made a couple of minor revisions and broke up some paragraphs into smaller sections to make them easier to read. If you want to continue with this article, I would suggest that you start expanding other aspects of the article outside of "Foraging". Katheefwah (talk) 19:28, 23 November 2012 (UTC)

I didn't have much to fix since there were so many editors before me. I made some minor grammar changes. I think the main thing to focus on is that you have a lot of subsections, more than usual pages. It seems like you made a section for each paper that you cited. Instead, you could try finding related ideas and putting them under maybe 2-3 bigger headings. I think it would make the article less choppy and more cohesive. Overall, great job. Katims90 (talk) 18:29, 25 November 2012 (UTC)