Talk:Scared to Be Lonely/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: K. Peake (talk · contribs) 19:52, 23 November 2020 (UTC)

From "No Lie" to this; get ready for another review! --K. Peake 19:52, 23 November 2020 (UTC)

Infobox and lead
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 * WP:OVERLINK of Martin Garrix under producer(s)
 * "on 27 January 2017 through" → "on 27 January 2017 by"
 * "after Garrix premiered it" → "after being premiered by Garrix"
 * "of Lipa's eponymous debut album" → "of Lipa's eponymous debut studio album,"
 * ""Scared to Be Lonely" was met with acclaim" → ""Scared to Be Lonely" received acclaim"
 * "the top 10 of 17 charts worldwide," → "the top 10 of charts in 17 countries worldwide,"
 * "Garrix's native of" → "Garrix's native region of"
 * "where it reached the third position." → "reaching the third position."
 * "number 14 and 76 respectively on" → "number 14 and 76, respectively, on"
 * "The song is certified platinum" → "The song has since been certified platinum"
 * "including the UK and US where it received platinum certifications from the British Phonographic Industry (BPI) and Recording Industry Association of America (RIAA)," → "including the United Kingdom and United States, where it was certified platinum by the British Phonographic Industry (BPI) and Recording Industry Association of America (RIAA), respectively,"
 * "a triple platinum from the" → "being certified triple platinum by the"
 * Identify NVPI by its full name and put the abbreviation in brackets
 * "sings in the middle of a forest." → "sings in a forest."
 * "promoted the track with live performances at Capital FM's Jingle Bell Ball," → "promoted the song in 2017 with live performances at Capital FM's the Jingle Bell Ball,""
 * Target acoustic to Acoustic music

Background and recording
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 * "of his club extended play" → "of a club record in his third extended play"
 * "meeting with his label with seven new songs" → "meeting with his record label that featured seven new songs" with the wikilink, plus name the label
 * Shouldn't the production information be directly after the writing part?
 * "of a vocalist. Several artists recorded" → "of a vocalist, with several artists recording"
 * "of collaborators. He reached out to Lipa's management hoping" → "of collaborators, with him reaching out to Lipa's management in hope"
 * "expressed he admiration of it" → "expressed her admiration of the song"
 * "were introduced by" → "had been introduced by"
 * Remove target on production
 * "duties were taken on by Garrix," → "was done by Garrix,"
 * "while Frank van Essen did the" → "while Frank van Essen contributed the"
 * Remove wikilink on Netherlands

Music and lyrics
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 * "of the song, that uses halt-time" → "of the song, which uses half-time" on the audio sample text
 * ""Scared to Be Lonely" is primarily a" → "Musically, "Scared to Be Lonely" is a"
 * "that incorporates elements of" → "with elements of"
 * "electro,[10] emo-EDM music." → "electro,[10] and emo-EDM."
 * "for three minutes and 40 seconds," → "for 3:40,"
 * "is composed in time and the key of" → "is set in the time signature of  time]] and is composed in the key of"
 * "138 beats per minute, and a" → "138 beats per minute and a"
 * Remove wikilink on piano
 * "items are added." → "items come in."
 * Wikilink upbeat per MOS:LINK2SECT
 * "future bass and" → "future bass, and"

Release

 * "similar to the cover art for" → "similarly to the cover art for"
 * "The formally announced" → "The former announced"
 * That was meant to say "They formally announced", my mistake. LOVI  33  20:13, 25 November 2020 (UTC)
 * Nice catch there! --K. Peake 21:49, 25 November 2020 (UTC)


 * "of the song and" → "of the song as well as one of its"
 * "It was officially released for" → "It was released for" since the labels make it clear this was an official release
 * "on 27 January 2017 through" → "on 27 January 2017, through"
 * Not sure if it should be named as Garrix's label since you should introduce it as that in the opening section instead; keep the name either way though
 * Removed. LOVI  33  20:13, 25 November 2020 (UTC)

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 * "It was later included as" → ""Scared to Be Lonely" was later included as"
 * "released on 19 October 2018 through" → "released on 19 October 2018 by"

Critical reception
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 * Retitle to Reception because there is an award that does not have its own sub-section and should not either due to it only being mentioned for one sentence
 * "was met with critical acclaim." → "was met with acclaim from music critics."
 * "while labelling it a" → "while labelling the song a"
 * "thought the song was reminiscent of The Chainsmokers" → "thought the song is reminiscent of the Chainsmokers" per MOS:THEMUSIC
 * "its potential to be a bonus track on Lipa's debut album as it" → "the song's potential to be a bonus track on Dua Lipa, as it" with the wikilink per MOS:LINK2SECT
 * Target ballad to Sentimental ballad
 * "praising the space give for" → "praising the space given for"
 * "third best song behind" → "third best song, behind"
 * "They saw the strength" → "The two of them saw the strength"
 * "in its subtlety and" → "in the song's subtlety and"
 * "and commended its" → "and commended the"

Commercial performance
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 * "at number five on the" → "at number five on the Netherlands'"
 * "it rose to a peak of number three on the chart," → "it rose to a peak of number three,"
 * "with a debut of number 29 and a peak of" → "debuting at number 29 and attaining a peak position of"
 * "It reached the summit" → "The song reached the summit"
 * "on the chart dated" → "on the issue dated"
 * "a peak of 14, where it spent two weeks." → "a peak of number 14 on the chart, spending two weeks at the position."
 * "In both weeks at its peak," → "In both weeks that the song was at its peak,"
 * "in the top 15 of the chart" → "in the top 15 of the UK Singles Chart"
 * "It spent a total of" → ""Scared to be Lonely" spent a total of"
 * The word Chart should have correct capitalisation for the dance chart's name
 * "debuted 88 on the" → "debuted at number 88 on the"
 * "charted dated" → "chart issue dated"
 * "selling 1,000,000 track-equivalent units in the United States." → "selling 1,000,000 track-equivalent units in the US."
 * "reached the top 10 of charts in" → "further reached the top 10 of charts in"
 * "also holds a diamond certification in" → "has been certified diamond in"
 * "in Norway and Sweden," → "in Norway and Sweden, respectively,"
 * "double platinum in Australia,[69] Canada,[70] and Italy." → "double platinum in Australia,[69] Canada,[70] and Italy, respectively."

Music videos

 * Img needs a full-stop to end the text
 * "and was released alongside" → "and released alongside"
 * Remove target on Scandinavian
 * "They sourced several" → "The company sourced several"
 * Wikilink Alexa
 * Targeted to Arri Alexa as Alexa is a disambiguation page. LOVI  33  20:29, 25 November 2020 (UTC)

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 * "behind it are the moments" → "behind it comes from the moments"
 * "wandering around the landscape reminiscing" → "wandering around the landscape while reminiscing"
 * Wikilink aspect ratios
 * "with partners in a" → "accompanied by partners in a"

Credits and personnel

 * Good

Live performances
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 * "his 15 April 2017 Coachella Valley Music and Arts Festival set," → "his 15 April 2017 set at the Coachella Valley Music and Arts Festival,"
 * "Capital FM's Jingle Bell Ball on" → "Capital FM's the Jingle Bell Ball on"

Remixes

 * "Two remix extended plays were" → "Two remix EPs were"
 * "that just contain powerful atmosphere and" → "that contain just a powerful atmosphere and"
 * Wikilink funky
 * "DubVision creates a" → "DubVision created a"
 * Shouldn't the word "catchy" be in speech marks?
 * Added. LOVI  33  21:19, 25 November 2020 (UTC)

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 * "was noted for" → "remix was noted for"
 * Wikilink 8-bit sounds
 * "Joe Mason recorded" → "Joe Mason featured"
 * Target re-pitched to Pitch (music)
 * Acoustic version should have its own para
 * "Lipa's wanted to" → "Lipa had wanted to"

Track listings

 * Good

Credits and personnel
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 * Remove wikilink on Netherlands

Weekly charts

 * Good

Year-end charts
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 * UK Singles (Official Charts Company) → UK Singles (OCC)

Certifications

 * Portugal certification is not backed up
 * Removed as I could not find a source to back it up. LOVI  33  21:36, 25 November 2020 (UTC)

Release history
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 * Label → Label(s)

Final comments and verdict

 * after wrapping one up for you once again rather quickly, hope your response rate will keep the trend going! --K. Peake 19:21, 24 November 2020 (UTC)
 * thanks for another amazing review, you always do such a great job. I have addressed all your comments above. Let me know if anything else has to be done. LOVI  33  21:45, 25 November 2020 (UTC)
 * ✅ after you have responded to all of my points at a fantastic rate and thank you, it is always an honour to work with you on Wiki! --K. Peake 21:49, 25 November 2020 (UTC)