Talk:Scherzo in F-sharp minor (Shostakovich)/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: K. Peake (talk · contribs) 06:51, 10 July 2022 (UTC)

I will review this short article today; it is appropriately the GAN before mine in the queue! --K. Peake 06:51, 10 July 2022 (UTC)


 * Thanks for your review, again! Really appreciate the comments. I have addressed them all now. Let me know if there's anything else to do.  Unexpected lydian ♯4 talk‽  15:01, 12 July 2022 (UTC)

Infobox and lead

 * Link anything significant in the infobox like you have elsewhere, e.g. Dmitri Shostakovich
 * Introduce who Dmitri Shostakovich is
 * Pipe Petrograd Conservatory to Saint Petersburg Conservatory
 * "It is one of" → "The composition is one of"
 * "It was premiered in" → "The composition was premiered in"
 * After the above sentence, add one about the themes of this composition, followed by a critical reception sentence; split into two paras if enough sentences
 * Wikilink F-sharp minor
 * "It was premiered in" → "The composition was premiered in"
 * After the above sentence, add one about the themes of this composition, followed by a critical reception sentence; split into two paras if enough sentences
 * Wikilink F-sharp minor
 * After the above sentence, add one about the themes of this composition, followed by a critical reception sentence; split into two paras if enough sentences
 * Wikilink F-sharp minor
 * Wikilink F-sharp minor

Background

 * Wikilink F-sharp minor
 * "during the autumn of early winter months" I don't think this actually makes sense
 * Should be "or", have changed. ✅
 * "the composers' first year at" → "the composer's first year at"
 * Pipe Petrograd Conservatory to Saint Petersburg Conservatory
 * "Shostakovich was almost fifteen." → "Shostakovich was almost 15." per MOS:NUM
 * Also changed thirteen to 13. ✅
 * Shouldn't you write "this generally remains" since the date has been disputed as you've cited here?
 * Wikilink B minor
 * "composition teacher, Maximilian Steinberg, who had taught Shostakovich" → "composition teacher Maximilian Steinberg, who had taught him"
 * The last para can be moved to the end of the critical assessment section, which can be also a legacy one as I will later explain
 * Wikilink B minor
 * "composition teacher, Maximilian Steinberg, who had taught Shostakovich" → "composition teacher Maximilian Steinberg, who had taught him"
 * The last para can be moved to the end of the critical assessment section, which can be also a legacy one as I will later explain
 * "composition teacher, Maximilian Steinberg, who had taught Shostakovich" → "composition teacher Maximilian Steinberg, who had taught him"
 * The last para can be moved to the end of the critical assessment section, which can be also a legacy one as I will later explain
 * The last para can be moved to the end of the critical assessment section, which can be also a legacy one as I will later explain

Form

 * Pipe Tchaikovsky to Pyotr Ilyich Tchaikovsky
 * See MOS:NUM for the correct formatting of the numbers of the instruments
 * "reminiscent of Maximillian Steinberg." → "reminiscent of Steinberg."
 * Wikilink D major
 * "reminiscent of Maximillian Steinberg." → "reminiscent of Steinberg."
 * Wikilink D major
 * Wikilink D major

Critical assessment

 * Retitle to Reception and legacy
 * Add a comma after Nikolai Malko
 * Mention the year of Symphony No. 1
 * Pipe ballet to Ballet (music)
 * Remove wikilink on Tchaikovsky
 * Pipe Delibes to Léo Delibes
 * Remove comma before Children's Notebook
 * "to the composer: Gillies" → "to the composer; Gillies"
 * Remove wikilink on Tchaikovsky
 * Pipe Delibes to Léo Delibes
 * Remove comma before Children's Notebook
 * "to the composer: Gillies" → "to the composer; Gillies"
 * Remove comma before Children's Notebook
 * "to the composer: Gillies" → "to the composer; Gillies"
 * "to the composer: Gillies" → "to the composer; Gillies"

Final comments and verdict

 * until all of the issues are fixed; nice job on this one! --K. Peake 08:30, 10 July 2022 (UTC)
 * ✅ now; I did some brief copy editing for appropriate usage of paras! --K. Peake 07:27, 14 July 2022 (UTC)