Talk:Scorpion pose/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Augustios Paleo (talk · contribs) 20:12, 2 August 2023 (UTC)


 * Many thanks. I'm out of office so may respond slowly. Chiswick Chap (talk) 15:12, 3 August 2023 (UTC)


 * I will do this review today or tomorrow.

Review

 * Earwig detected low percentages of copying, so this passes that.
 * Noted.


 * " yoga as exercise" should it be "as an" exercise?
 * It's correct as it is, exercise as a thing of quantity.


 * Is there any more info on the origin? If not, this section should be good.
 * That's about it on this aspect.


 * hyphen between "20th" and "century"
 * Added.


 * " B. K. S. Iyengar's 1966 Light on Yoga grades it as level 32 out of 60." on what scale? And say something like "Yoga specialist B. K. S...."
 * The scale is the "out of 60", which is Iyengar's own. Added.


 * "head is lifted from the ground so the body is supported only by the forearms" remove "from the ground"
 * Done.


 * the word "variant" is repetitive, change to "form", "variety", etc.
 * Would much prefer not to do that, as all the Yoga articles use this word with this meaning.


 * "props and are able to land safely if they fall; this requires the ability to perform backarches such as Urdhva " change "are able to" to "can", and "backarches" is two words.
 * Reworded. It's one word as a noun.


 * "with the back less extremely arched." backless is one word
 * No, that would be a backless dress, this means that "less" qualifies "extremely".


 * In the "Beginner to intermediate" section, combine sentences into paragraphs for each form. The current spacing is unnecessary
 * Done.


 * "but with only the elbows on the ground, the hands cradling the face, making it a difficult balance" change to "and the hands"
 * No, as stated the hands cradle the face, which is not on the ground.


 * "In 2022, the Indian yoga teacher Yash Moradiya held the pose for 29 minutes and 4 seconds, as measured by Guinness World Records in Dubai.[22]" link Dubai and say "Dubai, UAE" or "Dubai, United Arab Emirates
 * Added.


 * Great job!
 * Many thanks!