Talk:Scotland under the Commonwealth/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Peacemaker67 (talk · contribs) 00:43, 1 October 2014 (UTC)

Update on progress
Lead
 * suggest "Scotland under the Commonwealth refers to the history of Scotland between February 1652 and June 1660, from the declaration that the kingdom was part of the Commonwealth of England until the Restoration of the monarchy and Scotland's position as an independent kingdom."
 * WP:REFERS discourages "refers" in the opening sentence.--  SabreBD  (talk) 20:48, 5 October 2014 (UTC)
 * Fair point. Peacemaker67 (send... over) 11:39, 7 October 2014 (UTC)
 * suggest "After the execution of Charles I in 1649, the Scottish Parliament declared his son Charles II to be King of Great Britain and Ireland."
 * ✅.--  SabreBD  (talk) 20:48, 5 October 2014 (UTC)
 * suggest a comma after "Under the Tender of Union", "Under the terms of the union" and
 * suggest "began attempts
 * Did you do this already, there seem to be commas?--  SabreBD  (talk) 20:48, 5 October 2014 (UTC)
 * suggest "The regime tolerated Protestants, including sectarians, as "sectaries" is a very uncommon word
 * It is, however, the correct word. Sectarian suggests something else entirely.--  SabreBD  (talk) 20:48, 5 October 2014 (UTC)
 * significant groups - should that be "group"?
 * ✅.--  SabreBD  (talk) 20:48, 5 October 2014 (UTC)
 * The "Kirk" needs explanation.
 * ✅.--  SabreBD  (talk) 20:48, 5 October 2014 (UTC)
 * suggest "The Kirk was divided into Resolutioners and more hard line Protesters by the issue of co-operation with the crown."
 * ✅.--  SabreBD  (talk) 20:48, 5 October 2014 (UTC)
 * the use of "regime" is repetitive.
 * ✅. Changed some to Commonwealth.--  SabreBD  (talk) 20:48, 5 October 2014 (UTC)
 * suggest "and facilitated the Restoration of Charles II in 1660."
 * ✅.--  SabreBD  (talk) 21:12, 8 October 2014 (UTC)

Background ✅.--  SabreBD  (talk) 21:12, 8 October 2014 (UTC) ✅.--  SabreBD  (talk) 21:12, 8 October 2014 (UTC) Constitutional status ✅.--  SabreBD  (talk) 21:12, 8 October 2014 (UTC)
 * suggest you split this sentence into two, as follows: "Having supported Parliament in the First English Civil War (1642–46) under the Solemn League and Covenant, the Covenanter government in Scotland came under the control of the Engagers. As part of the Second English Civil War they invaded England in support of royalist risings, and were defeated by the New Model Army under Oliver Cromwell at Battle of Preston in 1648."
 * ✅.--  SabreBD  (talk) 21:12, 8 October 2014 (UTC)
 * suggest you explicitly state that the Scottish Parliament were the ones who declared Charles II king, and king of Great Britain and Ireland, as the casual reader might think it was just Scotland.
 * add a comma after "was no rising in their favour"
 * check the quote "so much of Scotland as it now under" should "it" be "is"?

Administration ✅.--  SabreBD  (talk) 21:12, 8 October 2014 (UTC) ✅.--  SabreBD  (talk) 21:12, 8 October 2014 (UTC) ✅.--  SabreBD  (talk) 21:12, 8 October 2014 (UTC) ✅.--  SabreBD  (talk) 21:12, 8 October 2014 (UTC)
 * Scottish Estates needs explanation
 * £50,0000?
 * suggest "by 1655, and was still not complete"
 * "by a seven commissioners"

Resistance ✅.--  SabreBD  (talk) 21:12, 8 October 2014 (UTC) Religion ✅.--  SabreBD  (talk) 21:12, 8 October 2014 (UTC) ✅.--  SabreBD  (talk) 21:12, 8 October 2014 (UTC)
 * suggest "As a result, the military Royalist military effort petered out."
 * "the Kirk" needs explanation
 * should "Consultations" have an initial capital?
 * see my earlier comment re: sectaries

'Economy and taxation ✅.--  SabreBD  (talk) 21:12, 8 October 2014 (UTC)
 * "free quarter" needs explanation. Do you mean "free quarters"