Talk:Seacology/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: – Quadell (talk) 16:37, 16 August 2011 (UTC)

Nominator: User:Visionholder

Issues

 * 1a: The first sentence in History needs to be split.
 * Done. –  VisionHolder « talk » 09:55, 17 August 2011 (UTC)


 * 1a: "When cyclone Ofa destroyed the primary school in 1990..." What primary school? The one in Falealupo? It isn't clear.
 * Done. –  VisionHolder « talk » 09:55, 17 August 2011 (UTC)


 * 1a: The sentence that begins "In a worst-case scenario," sounds as if it's trying to convince the reader that this approach is superior to others. I understand that it comes from a quote by Erdmann in the source. I believe this should either be reworded or attributed as an opinion.
 * Thank you for catching this. This is precisely the kind of thing I hoped you would help me locate and fix during the GAN review.  For this case, I've chosen to attribute the statement.  Please let me know if it looks okay. –  VisionHolder  « talk » 18:04, 17 August 2011 (UTC)
 * All good.


 * 1b: The lede mentions "the continual loss of unique island cultures". I have no doubt that's true, but I don't see it supported in the text. (The "high risk of extinction for island fauna and the decline in coral reef ecosystems" part is fully expanded in the text, however.)
 * Very good catch. I thought I had covered it in the body, but I did not.  Reviewing my sources, I have nothing to support it.  I tried finding a new source and came up blank.  Therefore, I've removed the mention from the lead. –  VisionHolder  « talk » 18:04, 17 August 2011 (UTC)
 * Fair enough.


 * Minor question: The lede and body describe how Seacology efforts helped protect the Hainan black crested gibbon, "the rarest primate in the world". Is there some way we could link to the featured list The World's 25 Most Endangered Primates? That list only gives the species Eastern black crested gibbon, not the subspecies, so I don't know if there's a way these could be linked without straining the text. Still, it would be nice if it's possible.
 * Good idea... I added a link in the lead. Let me know if that's alright.  (Btw, I'm glad to see people are aware of that list and that it's getting decent daily traffic.  It was a pain to write, but very rewarding.) –  VisionHolder  « talk » 18:04, 17 August 2011 (UTC)