Talk:Sean McVay effect/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Etriusus (talk · contribs) 21:00, 26 November 2022 (UTC)

and, I'll start this review.

Copy-vios

 * Only quotes come up on Earwig
 * A handful of spotchecks find nothing exciting

Sourcing

 * A manual check finds that all the links are active and archived.
 * No immediate concerns about the reliability of anything

Images

 * Only thing of note is File:Sean McVay.png. Appears to be a Youtube screengrab that is CC-BY 2.0. Should be fine for now.

Prose

 * MOS:LEAD None of these statements are particularly controversial and all seem to be cited elsewhere. Is citing them in the intro necessary?
 * ✅ Moved the sources to the body – Flowerkiller1692 (talk) 22:33, 27 November 2022 (UTC)


 * Super Bowl era. 'era' implies this is a time frame. either fix the link or clarify
 * "(1966–present)" There it is!! Please add to intro. I add these notes as I go.
 * ✅ added to intro – Flowerkiller1692 (talk) 22:33, 27 November 2022 (UTC)


 * 'high-powered offense' WP:PUFFERY, I'm not seeing any indication this is a sport-specific term
 * ✅ changed to say "McVay quickly turned the Rams into the league's highest-scoring offense, resulting in the Rams becoming perennial title contenders and eventual champions (in Super Bowl LVI)" – Flowerkiller1692 (talk) 22:33, 27 November 2022 (UTC)


 * 'offensive backgrounds' no explanation on what this actually means, comes off as rather vague criteria. Add to background or link to an appropriate article.
 * ✅ changed from "with offensive background" to "specialized in offensive strategy". There is a whole section of the Strategy of American football page that talks about what offensive strategy is – Flowerkiller1692 (talk) 22:33, 27 November 2022 (UTC)


 * flurry of hires in the mold of McVay un-encyclopedic wording, please rephrase. flurry is almost bordering on WP:PUFFERY since 4 new highers isn't a particularly large number.
 * ✅ changed to "had several hires in the mold of McVay" – Flowerkiller1692 (talk) 22:33, 27 November 2022 (UTC)


 * With the exception of Gase, all of these coaches were alleged to be hired due to their connections... run on sentance
 * ✅ changed to "Nearly all of these coaches were alleged to be hired due to their connections with McVay" – Flowerkiller1692 (talk) 22:33, 27 November 2022 (UTC)


 * From 2017–2019, 75% of available.. switching from percentage to fraction, difficult to follow the actual trend.
 * ✅ – Flowerkiller1692 (talk) 22:33, 27 November 2022 (UTC)

This page uses a bit too much football jargon overall, making it difficult for the non-football enthusiasts. It's nothing major and honestly, the page just needs a bit of clean up before passing to GA. I made a few CEs/clarifications of my own so please review them when you can. Putting on hold. Etrius ( Us) 21:00, 26 November 2022 (UTC)

made appropriate edits. Let me know what else needs to be reworded. – Flowerkiller1692 (talk) 22:33, 27 November 2022 (UTC)


 * Excellent!!! I gave the article a second review. Article passes at this time, congrats on the GA!!! Both of you!!! Etrius ( Us) 03:13, 28 November 2022 (UTC)


 * GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)


 * 1) It is reasonably well written.
 * a (prose, spelling, and grammar): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
 * Prose is fine; article broadly meets standards of MOS.
 * 1) It is factually accurate and verifiable.
 * a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources):  c (OR):  d (copyvio and plagiarism):
 * Sources are reliable, and appropriate for this type of article; several were checked against the statements they supported with no issues found.
 * 1) It is broad in its coverage.
 * a (major aspects): b (focused):
 * Article has broad coverage with appropriate level of details.
 * 1) It follows the neutral point of view policy.
 * Fair representation without bias:
 * Yes
 * 1) It is stable.
 * No edit wars, etc.:
 * Yes
 * 1) It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
 * a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * All images have licenses making them available for use in this article, they are used appropriately, and have useful captions.
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail:
 * Article passes GA review. Good work!