Talk:Seattle SeaDogs/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Sammi Brie (talk · contribs) 21:41, 17 March 2023 (UTC)

GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)

(Criteria marked are unassessed)
 * 1) It is reasonably well written.
 * a. (prose, spelling, and grammar):
 * b. (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
 * 1) It is factually accurate and verifiable.
 * a. (reference section):
 * Bruce will know this, but most of these references are in NewsBank, thus the lack of URLs.
 * b. (citations to reliable sources):
 * c. (OR):
 * d. (copyvio and plagiarism):
 * Earwig finds no issues, but I kind of expected that given the NewsBank sourcing. Will check
 * 1) It is broad in its coverage.
 * a. (major aspects):
 * b. (focused):
 * 1) It follows the neutral point of view policy.
 * Fair representation without bias:
 * 1) It is stable.
 * No edit wars, etc.:
 * 1) It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
 * a. (images are tagged and non-free content have non-free use rationales):
 * The non-free logo has an NFUR. The KeyArena image is CC-BY 2.0.
 * b. (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * Encouragement: Add alt text.
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/fail:
 * Some copy cleanup is all this page needs to be passed for GA. Sammi Brie  (she/her • t • c) 23:33, 17 March 2023 (UTC)
 * 1) It follows the neutral point of view policy.
 * Fair representation without bias:
 * 1) It is stable.
 * No edit wars, etc.:
 * 1) It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
 * a. (images are tagged and non-free content have non-free use rationales):
 * The non-free logo has an NFUR. The KeyArena image is CC-BY 2.0.
 * b. (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * Encouragement: Add alt text.
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/fail:
 * Some copy cleanup is all this page needs to be passed for GA. Sammi Brie  (she/her • t • c) 23:33, 17 March 2023 (UTC)
 * The non-free logo has an NFUR. The KeyArena image is CC-BY 2.0.
 * b. (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * Encouragement: Add alt text.
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/fail:
 * Some copy cleanup is all this page needs to be passed for GA. Sammi Brie  (she/her • t • c) 23:33, 17 March 2023 (UTC)
 * Pass/fail:
 * Some copy cleanup is all this page needs to be passed for GA. Sammi Brie  (she/her • t • c) 23:33, 17 March 2023 (UTC)
 * Some copy cleanup is all this page needs to be passed for GA. Sammi Brie  (she/her • t • c) 23:33, 17 March 2023 (UTC)

Copy changes

 * The SeaDogs finished last in the Western Division with a 10–18 record and a league-low 143 goals scored, but earned a franchise-record 11–5 victory against the Detroit Neon in their final match of the season. Classic CinS. There's no subject after "but". I'd add "the team" as removing the comma removes the needed respite.
 * Done.
 * They then lost several matches and dropped from the top of the Western Division standings, but regained first place in late August with a 14–5 record. Same, though this could just be a comma removal.
 * Fixed.
 * a 21 wins remove the stray "a"
 * The last two commas in this sentence should be semicolons, as one of the list items has a comma in it.
 * Fixed the stray "a"; decided to split up the sentence.
 * The Knights had a 2–0 lead at halftime but four goals from the hosts gave Seattle a 4–3 victory and a berth in the CISL Championship against the Houston Hotshots, the 1996 runners-up. Conversely, you need a comma after "halftime"
 * Fixed.
 * Your radio editor nitpicks: AM is never a direct suffix. Never write KJR-AM, though I'm fine with KJR AM
 * Fixed.
 * Are there citations for some of the items in the Honors list that aren't mentioned elsewhere (like All-Star Game MVP)?
 * Added a few citations.

Spot checks

 * 6: Used twice. ✅
 * There were only 98 spectators at Seattle Center Arena at the start of the scrimmage for the new Continental Indoor Soccer League team, which begins play June 23 at home.
 * The SeaDogs are one of six teams with NBA ties in the 2-year-old, 15-team league. The others are Phoenix, Dallas, Detroit, Sacramento and Washington.
 * 7: It was a big debut on several counts, not the least of which was an opening night crowd of 3,529, larger than predicted at the 4,055-seat Arena. ✅
 * 18: In the stands, they also had their most successful season with an average attendance of 2,769, up from 1,720 last season. ... The SeaDogs, who set 27 club records ... They went from a league-worst 10-18 last season to 21-7 this season. ✅
 * 24: Mentions Olu-Mulomo's goal at 1:45 of the overtime. ✅
 * 37: From 2001... Now Schmetzer, 39, is on the other side of the equation after the Sounders introduced the Lake City native as their coach yesterday morning at team headquarters. Schmetzer gets his first chance as a professional head coach... ✅
 * Thanks for the review. I responded to your comments and made the necessary changes.  Sounder Bruce  05:28, 18 March 2023 (UTC)