Talk:Sega Channel/GA1

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Reviewer: Taylor Trescott (talk · contribs) 14:37, 13 December 2013 (UTC)

I'll review this. Looks interesting.  Taylor Trescott  - my talk + my edits 14:37, 13 December 2013 (UTC)
 * Cool, sounds good.  Red Phoenix  build the future...remember the past... 03:32, 15 December 2013 (UTC)


 * I've seen some images that show the Sega Channel logo (like this). I'm guessing they scanned the peripheral. Anyway, consider replacing the b&w one.
 * I'll see what I can do there. I'll likely just over upload it over the B&W one since it's fair use and replace it that way.   Red Phoenix  build the future...remember the past... 13:57, 16 December 2013 (UTC)
 * "April of 1993" - see WP:MONTH
 * Done.  Red Phoenix  build the future...remember the past... 13:57, 16 December 2013 (UTC)
 * "June of 1994" again, WP:MONTH
 * Done.  Red Phoenix  build the future...remember the past... 13:57, 16 December 2013 (UTC)
 * "At its peak, Sega Channel had over 250,000 subscribers" Do we know the time of this peak?
 * Not really; I haven't found any detail too specific. We know it has to be before March 1997 from the GameSpot article, but nothing I've been able to find has had any definitive date or time range on that.  It's been surprisingly hard just to find reliable sources on this at all.   Red Phoenix  build the future...remember the past... 13:57, 16 December 2013 (UTC)
 * "found that kids" I've been told that "kids" is too colloquial for an encyclopedia. Consider replacing it with "children" or something.
 * Done. Red Phoenix  build the future...remember the past... 13:57, 16 December 2013 (UTC)
 * "however, Sega had anticipated having over one million subscribers by the end of its first year, and had been made available to over 20 million households." This reads kind of awkwardly. I think you should change "and had been made available" to "had made the service available".
 * Used your wording. Thanks.   Red Phoenix  build the future...remember the past... 13:57, 16 December 2013 (UTC)

Overall, this is a pretty strong article. Nice work! On hold.  Taylor Trescott  - my talk + my edits 16:54, 15 December 2013 (UTC)
 * Thank you.  Red Phoenix  build the future...remember the past... 13:57, 16 December 2013 (UTC)
 * Promoted to GA.  Taylor Trescott  - my talk + my edits 22:25, 16 December 2013 (UTC)