Talk:Selena Live!/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Wizardman (talk · contribs) 19:11, 25 January 2012 (UTC)

I'll review this article shortly. Wizardman Operation Big Bear 19:11, 25 January 2012 (UTC)

Here's the issues I found:
 * "as part of the Selena: 20 Years of Music collection that included spoken liner notes" no idea what that means.
 * "Live! led Selena to win an unprecedented feat in the Tejano market," This feels rather POV and unnecessary.
 * "soon after Live! release." reword to "soon after the release of Live!" A bit passive, but Live!'s wouldn't look right.
 * "which were simultaneously in the top 5 positions" top five
 * "After Selena had opened her boutiques in January 1993,[7] she had decided " rm both hads, makes the prose feel crisper.
 * "to record a live album, while she " rm comma
 * "influenced with rock that centers the organ as its musical instrument foundation." not bad as is, but could be fine-tuned; took me a couple reads to figure out what it meant.
 * "singer for the band, Pete Astudillo." Astudillo's linked above so doesn't have to be here.
 * "The song describes a women" a woman
 * "The album remained on the chart, hovering the top 20 spots, respectively." Not sure what the sentence is meant to say; not the right usage of respectively either.
 * "peaked at number two before it hovered the top 10 spots " as above, feels like there's a word missing.

I'll put the article on hold, and after that I'll re-read it. Not sure whether I'll pass or fail just yet even after the above changes are made. Wizardman Operation Big Bear 03:36, 27 January 2012 (UTC)
 * ✅ All. Best, Jona yo!  Selena 4 ever  04:49, 27 January 2012 (UTC)
 * Okay, looks good. If you could fine someone to fine-tune the prose some more, I'd be willing to pass it. Right now it's not quite at GA-level but not bad enough to fail. Wizardman  Operation Big Bear 16:13, 27 January 2012 (UTC)
 * User:Tbhotch‎ recently c/e the article for me. I believe its now up to GA level. Best, Jona yo!  Selena 4 ever  21:00, 28 January 2012 (UTC)
 * Looks good now, so I'll pass the article. Wizardman  Operation Big Bear 19:53, 30 January 2012 (UTC)