Talk:Separate Vocations/GA1

GA Review
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Hello, sweeping through to review a couple of articles to handle the GAN backlog. See Talk:I Married Marge/GA1 for how I perform the review. Let's get started.  The Flash  {talk} 22:31, 11 August 2009 (UTC)

Lead

 * "[...]the school makes the students[...]" -> What school?
 * Might want the movie Bart's policemen results to the second sentence where you mention his grades improving, as there's the sentence is more focused on Lisa.
 * "It acquired a Nielsen Rating of 14.8, and was[...]" -> "Rating of 14.8 and was"
 * "It acquired a Nielsen Rating of 14.8, and was[...]" -> "Rating of 14.8 and was"
 * "It acquired a Nielsen Rating of 14.8, and was[...]" -> "Rating of 14.8 and was"

Plot

 * "Lisa is therefore forced to spend the day[...]" -> does she force herself or is it required by the test?
 * She is required by the test. Do you want me to change the text?
 * Yes, please.

Production

 * "[...]when they went to school. Reiss, for example,[...]" -> "went to school; Reis, for"
 * Not sure if this falls under the present-tense policy you addressed my last review, but should it not be "In one sequence where Bart imagines himself testifying in court, his voice had been censored and electronically altered to sound like American actor and television personalty Steve Allen" ? Since the producers did that during production of it, which is over?
 * This is a "plot thingy" and should be in present tense (the same reason the cultural references are in present tense).
 * "[...]personality Steve Allen. The producers were able to get Allen to appear in the episode for that part." -> this comes off as they made his voice sound like it, then had Allen come in and revoice over it. As this is likely not the cast joined the sentences and make it appear less ambiguous.
 * "[...]personality Steve Allen. The producers were able to get Allen to appear in the episode for that part." -> this comes off as they made his voice sound like it, then had Allen come in and revoice over it. As this is likely not the cast joined the sentences and make it appear less ambiguous.

Cultural references

 * The Streets of San Francisco thing should be back to back, not interrupted by a different sentence.
 * Why? The Alf Clausen sentence needs to be where it is now, otherwise it won't make sense.
 * I meant starting the other reference section with "Another similar reference to the film" and move it to behind the whole first San Francisco part, which includes the Clausen part.
 * "[...]a blue dot. This is a[...]" -> "dot; this is"

Analysis

 * "The authors of Popular Culture and Critical Pedagogy writes[...]" -> "they write that it is[...]"

Reception

 * Any clue who wrote the source of the ratings?
 * ✅ (Associated Press)

Images

 * File:Jayne Meadows Steve Allen.jpg checks out - but wouldn't it be best just to crop that and simply show Allen?
 * File:Nancy Cartwright.jpg works with the OTRS
 * Thanks for the review! I think I got everything, but please check the article again.  The left orium  16:24, 12 August 2009 (UTC)
 * Thanks for the review! I think I got everything, but please check the article again.  The left orium  16:24, 12 August 2009 (UTC)

Final say

 * GA review (see here for criteria)

Great work! Not much to attend to, I think....
 * 1) It is reasonably well written.
 * a (prose): b (MoS):
 * The thing I noted about the San Francisco references in the "Cultural references" section need to be fixed as I further explained what I actually meant.
 * Still don't understand. Can you fix it yourself?
 * Done.
 * 1) It is factually accurate and verifiable.
 * a (references): b (citations to reliable sources):  c (OR):
 * Can you check on the author for the ref 11 like you did for ref 9?
 * No author information available for this one.
 * 1) It is broad in its coverage.
 * a (major aspects): b (focused):
 * 1) It follows the neutral point of view policy.
 * Fair representation without bias:
 * 1) It is stable.
 * No edit wars etc.:
 * 1) It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.
 * a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail:
 * Wee things left, then it's a-okay! I'll be moving onto the "Radio Bart" after this, so look out! :P  The Flash  {talk} 23:40, 12 August 2009 (UTC)
 * Thanks again for reviewing. I appreciate it.  The left orium  14:36, 13 August 2009 (UTC)
 * I've passed it - nice job!  The Flash  {talk} 17:14, 13 August 2009 (UTC)
 * Pass/Fail:
 * Wee things left, then it's a-okay! I'll be moving onto the "Radio Bart" after this, so look out! :P  The Flash  {talk} 23:40, 12 August 2009 (UTC)
 * Thanks again for reviewing. I appreciate it.  The left orium  14:36, 13 August 2009 (UTC)
 * I've passed it - nice job!  The Flash  {talk} 17:14, 13 August 2009 (UTC)