Talk:Serval/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Dunkleosteus77 (talk · contribs) 03:38, 16 June 2016 (UTC)

Comments by Dunkleosteus77

 * does "cat" have to be wikilinked? Wikilinking is generally for unknown terms, and I'm fairly certain everyone knows what a cat is (optional)
 * That's just a customary link to Felidae. I will remove it if you think it is improper.
 * I’d say keep it, to distinguish the taxon from the more familiar meaning of “housecat” (F. catus), in case a careless reader should mistake it for a domestic breed.—Odysseus 1 4 7  9  21:36, 26 June 2016 (UTC)


 * Don't start a sentence with a number, spell it out. I haven't checked the entire article for this but I see one in the lead.
 * Done


 * change "golden yellow to buff" to "golden-yellow to buff" or "golden yellow-to-buff" depending on what you mean here
 * Done


 * the last sentence of the first paragraph of the lead confuses me. Try using semi-colons instead of commas and reword a couple passages
 * Split into two.


 * wikilink "vlei rats" to "Otomys"
 * Done


 * change "in different parts of the range" to "in different parts of their range" (optional)
 * Done


 * expand IUCN on the first time using it and put the acronym in parentheses next to it
 * Done

This is just the lead, more comments on the way  User:Dunkleosteus77 &#124;push to talk 03:38, 16 June 2016 (UTC)

Thanks for taking this up. I will respond to all the comments in the next few days. Sainsf (talk · contribs) 11:30, 16 June 2016 (UTC)
 * Apologies for my delayed response, I have responded to all the points above. Sainsf  (talk · contribs) 06:29, 23 June 2016 (UTC)


 * translate "Die Säugetiere in Abbildungen nach der Natur mit Beschreibungen" and put it in parentheses next to this
 * No idea about German... Google Translate gives "The mammals in illustrations after nature with descriptions". I had better not do it.


 * I don't understand what "Pocock identified three races of the serval" means; could you list the races?
 * Sorry that is all I could access. "Race" means "variety", the source uses the word.


 * don't use undefined undefined in or next to parentheses, otherwise it'll turn out like "Males are 50 cm (but females tend to be 45 cm)"
 * Fixed two cases, the only ones I could find


 * I think the Threats and conservation and Relationship with human beings sections should be one section
 * Not sure, WP:MAMMAL is obscure on this. I did the same at Caracal.

Final comments

 * I don't think countries are supposed to be wikilinked
 * OK done.


 * duplinks:
 * phylogenetic
 * caracal (on the cladogram)
 * African golden cat (on the cladogram)
 * Lynx (on the cladogram)
 * oestrus
 * Removed phylogenetic and oestrus. I have retained the other three as links are typically kept on the cladogram even if they are duplinks. Sainsf  (talk · contribs) 02:35, 27 June 2016 (UTC)