Talk:Shadow Hare

Tone
The article needs some rewording to sound less like the tongue-in-cheek WLWT piece and more like part of an encyclopedia. That means fewer loaded adverbs like "undeterred" and "famed", and more objective sentences instead of quotes from Shadow Hare himself. – Minh Nguyễn (talk, contribs) 04:14, 5 June 2009 (UTC)


 * I believe "undeterred" is the best adjective to use. He was asked by police to stop, and he was not deterred by this. What would be a better word? -- I can't think of one. "Famed" is cutesy, and I'll remove it. The article has two sentences by Shadow Hare, which I don't think is excessive. I've tried to put in more objective sentences, but there's not much more to say. To you have any suggestions? What would fix the article so it wouldn't have tone problems, in your opinion? – Quadell (talk) 12:26, 5 June 2009 (UTC)


 * It's not that you've chosen an inaccurate word, but it and "vowing" highlight the fact that the article is a rather passionate retelling of some of Shadow Hare's exploits, and (as sad as it sounds) a passionate retelling isn't that typical at Wikipedia, especially with NPOV as policy. Although quoting two sentences isn't excessive in a news article, it doesn't seem like an encyclopedia article should rely on quotes as extensively as this one does. For example, the sentence:


 * At times he travels to other cities, working with local superheroes in other regions. "I've even teamed up with Mr. Extreme in California," Shadow Hare was quoted as saying, "and we were trying to track down a rapist."


 * could be reworded as simply:


 * At times he travels to work with local superheroes in other cities, such as Mr. Extreme in San Diego.


 * The cited articles already contain these quotes, so I wouldn't find them necessary to repeat here. It would be perfectly reasonable, however, to quote the articles that quote him, using the  parameter in cite news. That would moves these quotes from the main narrative to a footnote. That's really all I'm saying: some of these details would be better as footnotes.


 * By the way, I think the first paragraph actually strikes a pretty good tone. You and the others have done a good job keeping a straight face with this article. Some of the other coverage I've read is pretty sarcastic.


 * – Minh Nguyễn (talk, contribs) 03:20, 9 June 2009 (UTC)


 * I have made all these recommended changes, and removed the "tone" warning. If there are other issues of tone, let me know. – Quadell (talk) 13:13, 18 July 2014 (UTC)

Should it be pointed out the the "stylized hare" is a Donnie Darko logo? Nukeguy04 (talk) —Preceding undated comment added 02:44, 25 July 2009 (UTC).
 * I can't find any sources that say that. So no. – Quadell (talk) 13:13, 18 July 2014 (UTC)

Power ratings
I've added an infobox (costum infobox) highlighting power ratings so to better grasp Shadow Hare's powers. Feel free to remove it given resaonable conclusions but please first hit my talkpage and discuss your edit. PsychoticInquire (talk)