Talk:Shammuramat/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Jens Lallensack (talk · contribs) 00:00, 24 January 2022 (UTC)

Reading now, comments follow soon. --Jens Lallensack (talk) 00:00, 24 January 2022 (UTC)


 * Shammuramat reached an unusually prominent position in the reign of her son – maybe add "for a woman" for clarity?
 * It is technically an unusually prominent position regardless; the only other non-king people to figure as prominently in official contexts were the later queen Naqi'a and a handful of influential officials, such as Shamshi-ilu. Ichthyovenator (talk) 23:28, 25 January 2022 (UTC)


 * Upon her arrival to – "arrival in"?
 * Fixed. Ichthyovenator (talk) 23:28, 25 January 2022 (UTC)


 * The tale of Semiramis's conflict with Armenia could perhaps derive from remembrance of the campaigns of her son – does "her" refer to Semiramis or Shammuramat?
 * Shammuramat, I've changed "her son" to "Adad-nirari". Ichthyovenator (talk) 23:28, 25 January 2022 (UTC)


 * My biggest concern is that you repeatedly say "according to the legends" although it does not become clear if you refer to a particular source, or if this is the common narrative found in most of the variants.
 * IIRC most of the section is based on the account by Ctesias but I'll check the source soon again and verify. Ichthyovenator (talk) 23:28, 25 January 2022 (UTC)
 * Fixed. Ichthyovenator (talk) 17:49, 30 January 2022 (UTC)


 * In the legends, Semiramis's life comes to an end when she is killed by her son Ninyas, – from what follows it seems to become clear that this is only one of multiple variants of the legend?
 * It happens in quite a lot of the accounts, including Ctesias. The part that follows is just a weird justification for the murder added to the legend by some later authors. Ichthyovenator (talk) 17:49, 30 January 2022 (UTC)


 * Optional: I think it would be nicer to read if the longer paragraphs in "Semiramis legend" are split.
 * Split the second one but I can't figure out a good way to split the first one (which all deals with the divine origins and Ashkelon). Ichthyovenator (talk) 23:28, 25 January 2022 (UTC)


 * Awesome and highly interesting article, thank you. --Jens Lallensack (talk) 19:10, 25 January 2022 (UTC)
 * Thank you very much for reviewing! I'll try to fix the concerns with the section on the legend swiftly. Ichthyovenator (talk) 23:28, 25 January 2022 (UTC)
 * I've addressed all the comments. Let me know if there is anything more that should be amended. Ichthyovenator (talk) 17:49, 30 January 2022 (UTC)
 * Excellent, and congrats for the GA! --Jens Lallensack (talk) 21:38, 31 January 2022 (UTC)
 * Thank you! Ichthyovenator (talk) 23:09, 31 January 2022 (UTC)