Talk:She Bangs/GA2

GA Review
The edit link for this section can be used to add comments to the review.''

Reviewer: K. Peake (talk · contribs) 15:22, 5 April 2021 (UTC)

I will review this since it is the oldest unreviewed songs GAN and I was the reviewer the first time; I do regret somewhat how specific I was during GA reviews back then. --K. Peake 15:22, 5 April 2021 (UTC)

Infobox and lead

 * Why is "Amor" listed before "Por Arriba, Por Abajo" under B-sides in the infobox when the track listing has the opposite order?
 * "The song is a dance track, with Latin music influences, while the lyrics" → "A dance track with Latin music influences, its lyrics" but should salsa be mentioned here too?
 * "a woman and is" → "a woman, and the song is"
 * "It received widely positive reviews" → "The song received widely positive reviews"
 * The word Grammy is not needed before nomination when the awards show is mentioned that same sentence
 * "The song was" → "The former was" to avoid confusion with "Livin' la Vida Loca"
 * "United Kingdom, and" → "the United Kingdom, and"
 * "was also recorded under" → "was recorded under"
 * It needs to be sourced directly in the body that the Spanish language version was the one that charted on the Hot Latin Songs chart, as the article itself says of the song's era "Songs on the chart were not necessarily in Spanish language"
 * You should mention at least one of the live performances directly before the video info, plus use "the original version" here
 * "for "She Bangs" was" → "for the song was"
 * "by several artists including" → "by several artists, including"
 * Mention what year he covered the song

Background and release

 * "In 1999 and 2000," → "From 1999 to 2000,"
 * "fifth tour, Livin' la Vida Loca Tour to further promote" → "fifth tour the Livin' la Vida Loca Tour to promote"
 * "for his sixth studio album Sound Loaded." → "for Sound Loaded."
 * "name in an article" → "name as "She Bangs" in an article"
 * Pipe Spanish to Spanish language
 * "up in his career," and" → "up in his career", and" per MOS:QUOTE
 * "that there are possibilities that Martin might perform" → "the possibilities of Martin performing"
 * Pipe acoustic to Acoustic music
 * Change MTV channel to MTV
 * "Also Martin's publicist" → "Also, Martin's publicist"
 * "the music video was already shot" → "the song's music video had already been shot"
 * Remove wikilink on Bahamas
 * Mention the writers and producers here, as everything in the lead needs to be written out in the body
 * "Then it was released" → "Thereafter, the song was released" and shouldn't you be more specific than the markets, while following [6] still?
 * I'm sorry, I tried to find at the time I was writing this section, but I couldn't find any information about the specific markets. آرمین هویدایی (talk) 08:01, 6 April 2021 (UTC)
 * Do you think you can reword this part so it is less confusing though, without adding WP:OR of course? --K. Peake 08:18, 6 April 2021 (UTC)
 * I'm not sure how should I write it, can you please suggest me any phrases that would be less confusing? آرمین هویدایی (talk) 08:35, 6 April 2021 (UTC)
 * Maybe something like "released to the singles markets"? --K. Peake 08:49, 6 April 2021 (UTC)


 * "It was included as the first track on" → ""She Bangs" was included as the first track on Martin's sixth studio album Sound Loaded"

Composition and lyrics

 * Audio sample text looks good!
 * ""She Bangs" is a" → "Musically, "She Bangs" is a"
 * "features Latin music and salsa influences and" → "features Latin and salsa music influences, and"
 * Pipe Alfred Publishing Company to Alfred Music
 * Pipe key to Key (music)
 * "in common time signature, and with" → "in the time signature of common time, with"
 * Remove comma after D4 like I suggested in the first review
 * "trumpet blasts and" → "trumpet blasts, and"
 * Wikilink disco to itself
 * ""equally inevitable driving"" → ""equally inevitable [...] driving"" per the source
 * Pipe single to Single (music)
 * "the singer's previous singles," → "the singer's previous singles"
 * "harder to hold."" → "harder to hold"." per MOS:QUOTE, as suggested in the first review
 * Pipe Big Bang Theory to Big Bang
 * "and explodes. She" → "and explodes [...] She" per the source
 * Replace the word "bark" with something more appropriate for here, as it is a comp section not reception

Critical reception

 * Why is radio piped to airplay here instead of on its first mention in the opening section of the body?
 * "Also Taylor Mims from Billboard described" → "Also from Billboard, Taylor Mims described" but no ref is invoked for this review
 * Pipe pop to Pop music
 * "the song "glamorous"" → "the song "clamorous"" per the source
 * "opining that the "life" → "opining the "life"
 * Wikilink music video
 * Remove previous lead single introduction because we already know about "Livin' la Vida Loca"
 * "Orlando Sentinels Jim Abbott" → "the Orlando Sentinels Jim Abbott"
 * ""bon-bon shakers"" → ""'bon-bon' shakers"." per the source and add a pipe to the song article instead, as the reference is not directly mentioning but it seems they alluding to it
 * The third greatest hit ranking can be kept but remove the quote from the background of the list per WP:UNDUE

Accolades

 * "concluded by calling the song" → "called the song" because this is the start of his opinion piece

Commercial performance

 * "It spend 6 weeks" → "It spent 6 weeks"
 * "copies in the country." → "copies in Australia."
 * "to ultimately reaching its final peak of number two" → "to number 15, going on to reach its peak of number 2"
 * "November 4, 2000; similarly to the charts of other nations and" → "November 4, 2000, similarly to the charts of other nations, and"
 * "on the chart for" → "on the UK Singles Chart for" with the wikilink
 * "where it peaked at" → "charts, on which the song peaked at"
 * "it was certified gold" → "the song was certified gold"
 * "copies in the country." → "copies in Sweden."
 * "in the US and it is" → "in the United States and stands as" per MOS:US
 * Pipe Hot Dance Club Songs to Dance Club Songs
 * "at number 24 and 27," → "at numbers 24 and 27,"

Development and synopsis

 * Img looks good!
 * "helped with the creative direction" → "was responsible for the creative direction"
 * Remove wikilink on MTV
 * "made an appearance in" → "makes an appearance in"
 * The among other dancers part is not sourced, but him being a bartender and behind Martin is so mention those things instead
 * "as the beginning" → "which was at the beginning"

Reception and controversy

 * "station cut the scenes" → "stations cut the scenes"
 * "to more mature one." → "to a more mature one."
 * "it won the" → "it won the award for"

Live performances

 * Good

Cover versions and appearances in media

 * Mention that season three was in 2008
 * Introduce David Hasselhoff's role on the show
 * "gave it a performance on" → "delivered a performance of "She Bangs" on"
 * Mention that season three was in 2020, while mention series seven being that same year
 * Lowercase the B-52 per MOS:THEMUSIC
 * "and was ranked as one of" → "Wagner was ranked as one of" as a new sentence, as the current one is too long

William Hung version

 * Introduce who William Hung is in the first sentence
 * "singing and dancing, and Simon Cowell" → "singing and dancing; judge Simon Cowell"
 * "the "best track but" → "the "best track... but" per the source
 * "of the song was" → "of the song is"
 * The joint performance of the song was at the Monte Carlo Theater in Las Vegas, so reword accordingly
 * "performed the song" → "performed the original"
 * "and explained: "Otherwise I" → "and explained that "otherwise I"

Formats and track listings

 * Wikilink "Por Arriba, Por Abajo"
 * Pipe "Amor" to Amor (Ricky Martin song)

Credits and personnel

 * Brackets are missing closure for Indianapolis
 * Despite being sourced here, Glenn Monroig, Julia Sierra and Daniel López are not mentioned as songwriters in the infobox for some reason

Weekly charts

 * The Nielsen SoundScan chart for Canada actually leads to digital songs, so remove this since it is not notable when the song reached main charts in the country and also take it out of commercial performance
 * Europe (European Hot 100 Singles) → European Hot 100 Singles (Billboard)
 * Change Mahasz to Music & Media with the wikilink

Year-end charts

 * Good

Certifications

 * Good

Final comments and verdict

 * until all of the issues are fixed; glad to have reviewed this twice! --K. Peake 10:10, 6 April 2021 (UTC)
 * Thanks a lot for devoting your time on it. I fixed all the issues, I hope I have not missed anything. آرمین هویدایی (talk) 13:33, 7 April 2021 (UTC)
 * You still need to write out the songwriters and producers in the background section per my comment about the lead's content being in the body but otherwise, nice job on implementing the suggestions! --K. Peake 17:17, 7 April 2021 (UTC)
 * Done, thanks again. 19:12, 7 April 2021 (UTC)
 * ✅ now, I did make a fix where you had not listed the full stage name for the second mention of one of the songwriters. It is a great contrast for me to have gone from the failure of the first review to this one's pass; I'm sure the original nominators will be so proud of you and me somewhat too!!! --K. Peake 20:21, 7 April 2021 (UTC)
 * Thank you so much, and I'm very glad to hear that. آرمین هویدایی (talk) 20:31, 7 April 2021 (UTC)