Talk:Shea Theodore/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: MWright96 (talk · contribs) 18:53, 2 May 2020 (UTC)

Shall be reviewing this article as part of the GAN Backlog Drive of April to May 2020. MWright96 (talk) 18:53, 2 May 2020 (UTC)
 * 1) It is reasonably well written.
 * a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
 * 1) It is factually accurate and verifiable.
 * a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources):  c (OR):
 * 1) It is broad in its coverage.
 * a (major aspects): b (focused):
 * 1) It follows the neutral point of view policy.
 * Fair representation without bias:
 * 1) It is stable.
 * No edit wars, etc.:
 * 1) It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
 * a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail:
 * 1) It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
 * a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail:
 * Pass/Fail:

Lead

 * Perhaps include his achievements in international play in the lead? ✅

Personal life

 * The Province mentions that Theodore's mother works at a bank. I think it would benefit the article if this fact was mentioned ✅

Youth

 * "option out of the Burnaby Winter Club." - opting ✅
 * "He played Minor hockey" - the word highlighted in bold doesn't need to be capitalized ✅
 * Also, wikilink the above term for non-Ice hockey readers ✅
 * "he was measured at 5’10 and 142-pounds." - the convert templates would be helpful to the two figures indicated in bold ✅
 * "By the time he graduated from Minor hockey" - same issue as the second point I have raised in this section ✅
 * Wikilink 2011 Canada Winter Games since there is an article on the subject ✅
 * How about wikilinking the terms point and goal to the relevant articles for those unfamiliar with ice hockey terminology? ✅
 * "Theodore was ranked 17th amongst American skated" - skaters ✅
 * Wikilink 2013–14 season to 2013–14 WHL season ✅
 * Wikilink scout to Scout (sport) and training camp to its respective article ✅
 * Wikilink Norfolk Admirals to Norfolk Admirals (AHL) on its first mention and junior hockey to Junior ice hockey ✅
 * Wikilink the term captain to Captain (ice hockey) ✅
 * "He joined the Ducks American Hockey League (AHL) affiliate," - just the acronyms AHL will suffice since the full name is mentioned in previous paragraph of the article ✅

Professional

 * "In the 1–0 win which ended the Flames' home win streak," - repetition of the word "win" ✅
 * "He would later recorded his first career NHL goal " - the text in bold can be changed to would later record or later recorded✅
 * "an amount he estimated suppressed 15." - 15 times. ✅
 * "and was praised for his skating ability." - praised by whom? ✅
 * "due to the contract dispute." - what contract dispute? Please elaborate further where possible since this is the first time the contract dispute is mentioned in the article ✅
 * "was invited to drop the Ceremonial first puck" - no need to captalize the word highlighted in bold ✅
 * "during the Golden Knights Hockey Fights Cancer game on November 22, 2019." - Langley Advance Times says the game happened on November 21 not November 22 ✅

International play

 * 2012–13 season is overlinked ✅
 * Wikilink Russians to Russia men's national junior ice hockey team ✅
 * Wikilink the second mention of Team Canada to Canada men's national junior ice hockey team ✅
 * "While undergoing preparations to compete," - to compete in the tournament, ✅
 * "after he failing a drug test" - either after failing or he failed please ✅
 * How about wikilinking hCG hormone to the appropriate article for those unfamiliar with it ✅
 * I believe it would help to wikilink the term blueline to the relevant article ✅