Talk:Shea Weber/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Orlandkurtenbach (talk) 11:28, 10 January 2011 (UTC)
 * GA review (see here for criteria)


 * 1) It is reasonably well written.
 * a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
 * 1) It is factually accurate and verifiable.
 * a (references): b (citations to reliable sources):  c (OR):
 * 1) It is broad in its coverage.
 * a (major aspects): b (focused):
 * 1) It follows the neutral point of view policy.
 * Fair representation without bias:
 * 1) It is stable.
 * No edit wars, etc.:
 * 1) It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.
 * a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail:
 * 1) It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.
 * a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail:
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail:


 * Early life
 * "Weber has a brother named Brandon..." Incohesive placement after death of mother. Maybe place in first paragraph after first mention of parents?✅
 * Junior career
 * Being "listed" needs better explanation. Even expanding that to "protected list" conveys more meaning.✅
 * I feel like the second and third mention of "junior B" when describing the championships are unnecessary, given that it's previously established that the KIJHL is a junior B league.✅
 * How did the Rockets do in the Memorial Cup? And how did they qualify if they lost the WHL finals?✅
 * Replace some "Weber"s with "he".✅
 * Nashville Predators
 * Goals and assists aren't linked in their first mentions in the article.✅ in previous section
 * "rash of injuries" sounds a little bit like slang.✅
 * Exact same phrasing in sentences for NHL YoungStars Game and NHL All-Star Game. Mix it up?✅
 * Are games played and penalty minutes "offensive categories"? Maybe reword to "statistical categories"?✅
 * International play
 * Saying that his experience at the '07 WC was "marred" by his suspension seems a little dramatic and POV. I also went ahead and removed "ugly" to help this along.✅
 * References
 * A lot of publications that needs italics (ie. The Province) do not have them.✅
 * Spell out acronyms of publications (ie. CBC, TSN, IIHF). I know it seems tedious, but I think it's good practice. Also, it helps consistency if other publications like National Hockey League and Canadian Hockey League are spelled out.✅
 * Ref 39 needs a title.✅
 * Refs 17, 20, 21, 27, 42, 43, and 46 are dead.✅
 * Other
 * Watch for redundancies in your prose. For example, writing the same word twice in a sentence. Fixed most, if not all, of these myself though.
 * Disambig Dan Boyle and Sicamous.✅
 * All issues have been addressed, but please add any further feedback you may have! Thanks so much for the review! Cheers. – Nurmsook!  talk...  23:14, 10 January 2011 (UTC)
 * Sweet. Everything looks good, but just one more issue that I noticed on the second read: There are no season stats for his junior career in the prose. I think this could definitely add to the article, especially for his award-winning seasons in the WHL. Also, there is no mention of his WHL rookie season. Just this last issue to deal with and I'll pass the article! Orlandkurtenbach (talk) 00:16, 11 January 2011 (UTC)
 * Should be all good now. I can't believe I forgot that rookie season! It was his draft year for crying out loud. I knew I was missing something. – Nurmsook!  talk...  03:57, 11 January 2011 (UTC)
 * Awesome. Looks good.. congrats! Orlandkurtenbach (talk) 08:43, 11 January 2011 (UTC)