Talk:Sheep Meadow/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: The Rambling Man (talk · contribs) 16:43, 9 September 2019 (UTC)

Comments - nice article. That's it for a quick review, so I'll put it on hold while we go through the preceding comments. The Rambling Man (Staying alive since 2005!) 19:18, 9 September 2019 (UTC)
 * "located ... located" probably can lose the second one altogether.
 * "with sheep. The sheep," unfortunate quick repeat.
 * You relink Greensward Plan but not Central Park in the first section of prose?
 * First two sentences of "Construction" section could be reversed to make more logical flow.
 * "two feet" you've converted everything so far...
 * Could link New Jersey.
 * "disruptive boulders" what?
 * "sixteen feet" see above.
 * "the most costly construction" can you quantify that and inflate to 2018 $ please?
 * " were loath to" in BritEng that would be "loathe"...
 * "Southdown" is piped to a redirect.
 * "Calvert Vaux.[13][15][14]" order.
 * "or "the Green".[18][13] " ditto.
 * " meadow's perimeter.[18][13] " thrice.
 * "certain time periods" could be "certain times"?
 * "The park's patronage increasingly came to include the middle and working class. Strict regulations, such as those against public gatherings, were gradually eased." consider merging, this is starting to read a little clunky.
 * "the high number of tennis permits" not sure you need "high" and it reads clunky as is for me.
 * "to the site of the sheepfold" probably would work with just "there".
 * "successful, however.[26]" not sure the point in "however".
 * "Sheep Meadow.[28][29]:984[30][3]:106–109" order.
 * Link Great Depression.
 * "Conservancy.[14][34][28] " order.
 * "resodding" do we all know what that means?
 * "the city began renovating the meadow and installing a sprinkler system in September 1979." why ing ing, why not "renovated, installed"?
 * "Once the lawn was reopened, team sports were banned from Sheep Meadow " I don't think another repeat of Sheep Meadow is needed here?
 * "The project was ... The project..." repetitive.
 * "Mineral Springs" section, should that be "Mineral Springs Pavilion"? If not, why is it capitalised?
 * "Seen in 2019" caption is not particularly informative, especially given the lack of whatever it is I'm supposed to be seeing!
 * "Now the open ..." see WP:PRECISELANG.
 * "each day[28][59] between April and October each year. " why there, why not at the end of the sentence?
 * "Sheep Meadow is heavily used, and in 2009, it was used by 30,000" used, used... repetitive.
 * "the meadow saw three million people" perhaps replace people with visitors or something to confirm it wasn't just a field looking at loads of people.
 * "For instance, in 1912, ..." I don't recall ever reading a Wikipedia article with "for instance" in it.
 * "playground contests[17][64] and model airplane races.[17] " just put [64] at the end...
 * "celebrations In 1916, " period needed.
 * " Stonewall Riots" no capital r.
 * "A concert" not good enough for a caption, where, when, who?
 * "Pocahontas" should be in italics and point to the right target (Pocahontas (1995 film)).
 * "it was nevertheless a major, if temporary, draw " can that be quantified?
 * "Current recurring events" probably best to just make it "Recurring events".
 * " September 11, 2001 attacks in 2001" um, perhaps just "September 11 attacks..."
 * "TSW-7A portable control tower" what is one of those?
 * "Production activity" what is that?
 * "11 am " -> "11 a.m." per MOS.
 * "with actual sheep" no need for "actual".
 * Avoid SHOUTING in the ref titles.
 * No spaced hyphens in the ref titles per MOS:DASH.
 * , thanks for the review. I fixed most of these issues, except one. I can't find a reliable source for the construction cost of the meadow, and the source doesn't say. epicgenius (talk) 20:51, 9 September 2019 (UTC)
 * A few replies:
 * " were loath to" in BritEng that would be "loathe"... - Yes, but in American "loathe" means "hate".
 * Likewise in BritEng, and it makes sense "to be loathe to do something" is to hate to do it. The Rambling Man (Staying alive since 2005!) 07:36, 11 September 2019 (UTC)
 * "Mineral Springs" section, should that be "Mineral Springs Pavilion"? - It's capitalized since it is a proper noun.
 * "TSW-7A portable control tower" - an air control tower. I removed the exact model number as unnecessary. epicgenius (talk) 20:54, 9 September 2019 (UTC)
 * Ok, I'm more than happy with the article, it's a shame we can't source an RS for the cost, but c'est la vie. I'm promoting to GA.  Cheers. The Rambling Man (Staying alive since 2005!) 08:53, 11 September 2019 (UTC)