Talk:Shelby Cullom Davis

Clarifying philanthropy section
As a librarian at the Cullom-Davis Library in Bradley University, mentioned in this article, I propose clarifying the opening sentence of the philanthropy section. The current version attempted to paraphrase the New York Times' obituary, but conflated and overstated the library's receipt. I would remove the (his alma mater) which is straight from the obit and is already covered in Education. I will add the citation to the sentence for the obit and I would like to combine the mentions of Wellesley then have a comma and "endowed" as a verb just before the library because there are no professorships or chairs at the library in that name. Thus:

He provided significant financial support to Princeton University, funded chairs and professorships at Wellesley College, and endowed the Cullom-Davis Library at Bradley University.

JenniferNM (talk) 14:08, 26 July 2022 (UTC)