Talk:Shelby Gem Factory/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Sammi Brie (talk · contribs) 21:18, 8 January 2022 (UTC)

Review in progress


 * GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)

This article is being put on a 7-day hold.
 * 1) It is reasonably well written.
 * a (prose, spelling, and grammar): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
 * 1) It is factually accurate and verifiable.
 * a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources):  c (OR):  d (copyvio and plagiarism):
 * 1) It is broad in its coverage.
 * a (major aspects): b (focused):
 * 1) It follows the neutral point of view policy.
 * Fair representation without bias:
 * 1) It is stable.
 * No edit wars, etc.:
 * 1) It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
 * a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail:
 * 1) It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
 * a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail:
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail:

Copy changes

 * There are numerous locations in the article that need tense changing to reflect the 2019 closure (e.g. is was). This is probably the single largest content issue on the page.

History

 * Jo Kelly should be Kelley.
 * ✅ --Doug Coldwell (talk) 11:18, 9 January 2022 (UTC)


 * Second paragraph could stand to be less choppy.
 * ✅ --Doug Coldwell (talk) 16:08, 9 January 2022 (UTC)

Factory

 * Remove the emdash in the second sentence.
 * ✅ --Doug Coldwell (talk) 16:15, 9 January 2022 (UTC)


 * Comma after "theater"
 * ✅ --Doug Coldwell (talk) 16:15, 9 January 2022 (UTC)


 * Set off "by then" in commas and then make "off limits" hyphenated
 * ✅ --Doug Coldwell (talk) 16:15, 9 January 2022 (UTC)

Gem manufacturing

 * Consider combining the second and third sentences.
 * ✅ --Doug Coldwell (talk) 16:20, 9 January 2022 (UTC)

Other items

 * I feel like there is something missing. Why did the factory close? How did the business evolve over the years? I'd love to know that but don't get that from this.


 * Watch tone in a few places which feels a touch promotional or overly positive.


 * Earwig mostly catches quotes in the article.


 * Practically every reference is archived.


 * Lots of great photos (some taken by Kelley in 2003!) which are all suitable for use. Some images do need alt tags.

Comments

 * Thanks for review. I'll start working on the issues.--Doug Coldwell (talk) 22:21, 8 January 2022 (UTC)
 * All issues have been addressed. Can you take another look. Thanks.--Doug Coldwell (talk) 19:43, 9 January 2022 (UTC)
 * Almost there (made a few minor cleanup changes). This sentence I'd excise for tone: The factory's FAQ said "our rubies and sapphires are really ruby and sapphire!" Ping me when that is removed and I think this can be promoted. Sammi Brie  (she/her • t • c) 22:28, 9 January 2022 (UTC)
 * = ✅ --Doug Coldwell (talk) 22:35, 9 January 2022 (UTC)