Talk:Shelter (Finneas song)/GA2

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Reviewer: K. Peake (talk · contribs) 08:43, 20 October 2020 (UTC)

Nice to see you so active again! I will wipe this review out very soon...

Infobox and lead

 * Finneas → Finneas O'Connell under songwriters
 * "It was released by" → "The song was released by"
 * Target single to Single (music)
 * "He wrote the song" → "Afterwards, he wrote the song"
 * Mention in this same para info about the song's lyrics
 * "A music video for the track was" → "A music video for "Shelter" was" with the wikilink
 * "shove him and toss him roughly." → "shove and toss him roughly."
 * "throughout October 2019," → "throughout October 2019 to support Blood Harmony,"
 * "his tour including performances of the track." → "the tour including performances of the song."

Background and composition

 * "written back in 2016." → "written back in 2016 by Finneas."
 * "Finneas had heard that" → "He had heard that"
 * "Avicii, was looking for" → "Avicii was looking for"
 * "Finneas wrote the track" → "Following on from this, Finneas wrote the track"
 * Only [2] needs to be at the end of the "confess" sentence since the other sources are irrelevant
 * "as the third single on" → "as the third single from" with the target
 * Remove wikilink on Blood Harmony
 * "and streaming through his record label" → "and streaming, through his record label" with the wikilink
 * The pop track sentence should start the second para
 * "described the track as" → "described "Shelter" as"
 * ""Shelter" features" → "The track features"
 * Target Latin to Latin music
 * "gospel choir effect[s] during the chorus," → "gospel choir effect[s] that appear during the chorus," with the targets
 * "reverb’d handclaps, bluesy vocal embellishment" → "reverb'd handclaps, bluesy vocal embellishment," with the target and wikilink
 * Target bridge to Bridge (music)
 * "And further comments the song is" → "He further commented that the track is"
 * Wikilink acoustic guitar
 * "melody" that is very" → "melody", which is very"
 * Add release year of "Shape of You" in brackets
 * "is set at a dance tempo." → "is set in a dance tempo." with the wikilink
 * Merge the final para with this one in the new order
 * "is about a love for a girl that brings" → "is about a lover that brings"
 * ""They call us" → "He represents the trouble with the lyrics, "They call us"
 * "for the track only gets more urgent as it continues." → "of the track becomes more urgent as it continues:"

Critical reception

 * "received mainly positive reviews" → "was met with mainly positive reviews"
 * "noted that Shelter was" → "noted that "Shelter" was"
 * "he produces for his sister [Billie] [Eilish]"." → "[Finneas] produces for his sister [Billie Eilish]"." and add the wikilink to her in the way that it is done
 * "while he mentions that it's" → "while mentioning that its"
 * "stated that with "Shelter" it" → "stated that the song"
 * "and calls the production" → "and he called the production"
 * Wikilink uptempo per MOS:LINK2SECT
 * "mentions the song" → "mentioned the song"

Promotion

 * Wikilink music video
 * "was directed by Sam Bennett and was uploaded to" → "was uploaded to" to avoid repetition
 * Remove the word "official"
 * "while shot in" → "while it was shot in"
 * "It begins with" → "The visual begins with"
 * "through the Los Angeles river" → "along the Los Angeles river"
 * Remove the "wearing" part since that is totally unsourced
 * The lyrics that Finneas is quoted as crying are not the ones that 14 instates; fix this
 * "turn to shove and toss him roughly around the riverbed." → "try to tug and toss him roughly around the empty riverbed, as well as mobbing him."
 * "Grease and praised the choreography," → "Grease, while praising the choreography,"
 * "he performed from the EP" → "from the EP that he performed live"
 * The tour info is not backed up by the ref
 * "In October 2019, Finneas perfromed" → "In October 2019, Finneas performed"
 * "the Austin City Limits Music Festival and was backed up" → "the Austin City Limits Music Festival, being backed up

Release history

 * See MOS:TABLECAPTION
 * Format → Format(s)
 * Digital download and streaming should be separated in the table

Final comments and verdict

 * after reviewing this short article, though it is quite close to the criteria.

Kyle Peake, thank you so much for the review! Lmk if anything else needs to be done. The Ultimate Boss (talk) 07:32, 23 October 2020 (UTC)
 * This looks a lot better, but there is still no source for the song being performed on tour. --K. Peake 07:50, 23 October 2020 (UTC)
 * , oops sorry. Fixed. The Ultimate Boss (talk) 08:03, 23 October 2020 (UTC)
 * ✅ now, good job! --K. Peake 08:08, 23 October 2020 (UTC)