Talk:Shimazu Toyohisa

Absolutely unintelligible
About 90% of this article is completely unintelligble and just seems to be badly translated from Japanese... Not that I am an expert in Japanese, but perhaps this hould be handed to someone who could fix it up, because it is at least nicely elaborate. 80.158.46.83 (talk) 07:28, 15 July 2022 (UTC)

Mostly grammatically correct but still extremely unclear
A good deal of this article is worded so confusingly it's unclear to whom various pronouns refer. Quotations are also employed bizarrely.

It also uses words simply incorrectly which casts doubt as to the veracity of the rest of the article. For example; "Toyohisa's Buddhist name was 'Tenshin Shoun.' Incidentally, "Sekigahara Battle Picture Folding Screen" owned by Gifu City Museum of History depicts the figure of Toyohisa, who is in command of the horse." uses "incidentally" entirely wrong. Nothing there is incidental, so what else appears correct but is actually the wrong word?

Needs a lot of work and probably a full background check, this isn't appropriate for use yet. Sparkane (talk) 18:56, 19 August 2022 (UTC)