Talk:Shine (Gwen Stefani song)/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Azealia911 (talk · contribs) 13:06, 30 March 2016 (UTC)

Full review coming soon.  Azealia 911  talk  13:06, 30 March 2016 (UTC)
 * Thank you! Aoba47 (talk) 15:52, 30 March 2016 (UTC)

General comments
✅ I would say that it's extreme to calling padding, but I have removed them all.
 * I don't see the necessity or advantages of adding the year to a sentence after each mention of a work. Perhaps beneficial for contextual significance having the film's year mentioned, but listing each year the two collaborated in the background section feels like unnecessary padding.

Infobox and lead
✅ It is just a song. The promotional single identification was there before my edits and I forgot to change it. ✅ ✅ ✅ ✅ This is something only for the lead though so it would seem odd to make it too detailed as it should just be an indication of what is in the article. Aoba47 (talk) 16:49, 3 April 2016 (UTC)
 * What exactly qualifies this song to be regarded as a promotional single? It appears to simply be a song that leaked and then got a lyric video.
 * Remove (on YouTube)
 * Why is the label parameter filled in? If the song was never officially released, there was never a label to release it.
 * Unlink both Stefani and Williams in the writer parameter.
 * "Stefani initially disagreed with Williams' literal approach to the song's lyrics" it would be helpful to be given some context on the lyrics of the song before this sentence, it feels like something's left out.

Background

 * I'm sure that you could transfer some of the sources used in both this section and the critical reception section to create some kind of prose on the song's composition.
 * Actually, I do not see how that would be possible. A majority of the sources describe the song either 1) very vaguely or 2) the exact same so I would think that a separate section for the song's composition would be too short, too repetitive, and unnecessary as the "Background" section already covers pretty much all the information about the song. I could change the section title to "Background and composition" if that makes it clearer. Aoba47 (talk) 16:49, 3 April 2016 (UTC)

Critical reception
✅
 * Vibe is presented in italics.

Post-review comments

 * Passing  Azealia 911  talk  21:12, 4 April 2016 (UTC)
 * Thank you! Aoba47 (talk) 23:00, 4 April 2016 (UTC)