Talk:Shola Lynch

Wiki Education Foundation-supported course assignment
This article is or was the subject of a Wiki Education Foundation-supported course assignment. Further details are available on the course page. Student editor(s): Tash98. Peer reviewers: Vestagard, Oddball3055.

Above undated message substituted from Template:Dashboard.wikiedu.org assignment by PrimeBOT (talk) 03:33, 18 January 2022 (UTC)

Assessment of Article Draft
Revisions necessary

You're off to a good start, but you still have a little bit of work to do before moving your material over to mainspace.


 * You need to fix your citations (especially the New York Times citation, which right now just says "newspaper", and is missing the exact dates the article was published).
 * You need to proofread your work for grammar, especially for commas (placed before "which," for instance).
 * The filmography section is a good idea, but you should specify what role she played in each of those films or TV series.

--110laurent (talk) 23:19, 21 February 2016 (UTC)

Peer Review
Oddball3055

Overall the article is very well written in terms of choices of words and makes it flow nicely. A change would be to combine the first two sentences in the Career section into one paragraph. And clarify what an interest in "race" is in Career. Small spelling mistake in role for "Miracles" in Filmography. Nice job!! Oddball3055 (talk) 19:23, 29 February 2016 (UTC)

Overall, there were very few mistakes in your article when I read through it. Your writing is objective and the way you structured each section and paragraph was well thought-out. When copy editing, I noticed the dates of each film and tv series you mentioned were missing in some parts so I added them. I also linked a couple wikipedia pages to people you mentioned, like Shirley Chisholm and Ken Burns. I think your article is very well-put together. If you wanted to improve it, you could add an infobox and/or image.

Good work!Vestagard (talk) 03:49, 1 March 2016 (UTC)