Talk:Shuttle-Centaur/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Hog Farm (talk · contribs) 18:19, 28 October 2020 (UTC)


 * Lead
 * "To enable its installation a Shuttle's payload bay, the diameter of the Centaur's liquid hydrogen tank was increased" - No matter how many times I read this, it just doesn't seem right. Not sure if it's a grammar error or a comprehension error on my end.
 * ✅ Deleted this sentence. Don't think it needs to be in the lead. (Personally, I don't look at the lead much, and rarely pay much attention to it.)
 * Probably a touch on the short side for the lead. None of the congressional stuff that is mentioned quite a bit in the article never appears in the lead, for instance.


 * Expanded the lead. Hawkeye7   (discuss)  04:32, 30 October 2020 (UTC)


 * Centaur
 * "which were coming under intense scrutiny by increasing cost-conscious Congress" - Should this be increasingly?
 * ✅ Yes. Corrected. Hawkeye7   (discuss)  04:32, 30 October 2020 (UTC)


 * Space Shuttle upper stages
 * "A series of study contracts wet let, resulting in a decision that the IUS would be an expendable solid-fuel upper stage" - Wet?
 * ✅ Should have been "were". Corrected. Hawkeye7   (discuss)  04:32, 30 October 2020 (UTC)


 * Deep space probes
 * "On 6 February 1981 Strom Thurmond, the President pro tempore of the Senate, write directly to David Stockman" - You'll want the past tense of write
 * ✅ Typo. Corrected. Hawkeye7   (discuss)  04:32, 30 October 2020 (UTC)


 * Congressional approval
 * "and reduce the number of Moons visited by half when it got there" - Not convinced that Moons should be capitalized
 * ✅ De-capped. Hawkeye7   (discuss)  04:32, 30 October 2020 (UTC)


 * Design
 * "On 30 August 1982 A meeting of representatives of the NASA centers" - Lowercase A, and comma after 1982
 * ✅ De-capped. Comma added. Hawkeye7   (discuss)  04:32, 30 October 2020 (UTC)
 * The payload length given in the prose for Centaur G Prime varies from that given in the infobox
 * ✅ Fixed this. Hawkeye7   (discuss)  04:32, 30 October 2020 (UTC)


 * Infobox
 * Not seeing where the gross and empty masses are cited anywhere
 * ✅ Added. In practice, things were more complicated. Hawkeye7   (discuss)  04:32, 30 October 2020 (UTC)


 * Management
 * "He was an Associate administrator at NASA Headquarters" - I'm pretty sure either Associate should be lowercase or administrator should be capitalized
 * ✅ De-capped. Hawkeye7   (discuss)  04:32, 30 October 2020 (UTC)
 * "in 1985. this permitted an increase in staff for the first time in 20" - Start the sentence off with a capital letter
 * ✅ De-capped. Hawkeye7   (discuss)  04:32, 30 October 2020 (UTC)
 * Is it Marty Winkler or Marty Winkkler? Page 189 of this PDF suggests Winkler.  You use Winkkler.
 * ✅ Typo. Corrected. Hawkeye7   (discuss)  04:32, 30 October 2020 (UTC)


 * Preparations
 * "The theme music from Star War was played, a crowd of 300" - I do believe it's Star Wars
 * ✅ Corrected. Hawkeye7   (discuss)  04:32, 30 October 2020 (UTC)
 * "SC-1 as then flown to the Kennedy Space Center, where it was mated with CISS-1, which had arrived two months before." - Was, not as?
 * ✅ Corrected. Hawkeye7   (discuss)  04:32, 30 October 2020 (UTC)

That's it, I think. Mostly just copy editing stuff. Placing on hold. Hog Farm Bacon 01:08, 30 October 2020 (UTC)