Talk:Si Yi Chen/GA2

GA Review
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Reviewer: Grandiose (talk · contribs) 10:55, 6 December 2011 (UTC)


 * Citation needed tags must be fulfilled;
 * Refs 15 and 18 have dead links and should be updated or replaced.
 * If "Criticism of Australian Federal Police tipoff" is indeed relevant to Si Yi Chen - who is not mentioned - this needs to be made clearer or the section removed if not; the same goes for the "additional arrests" section.
 * The English should be tightened - the use of so many quotations gives the article a journalistic rather than encyclopedic tone. There are also some small mistakes - "abroad; saying" is not correct grammar, for example.
 * The lead should be longer - it needs to provide an adequate summary per WP:LEAD)
 * The article ought to say more about the man personally - but this sort of thoroughness is not required under the GACR
 * I'm also worried about some bias against the Indonesian authorities. Much is made of his appeals, and that of the Australian government. There is little from Indonesia in this regard. A few tweaks, such as a corresponding quotation or the Indonesian side of the story from a native newspaper would be sufficient.
 * Placing on hold for 7 days so these problems can be fixed. Grandiose (me, talk, contribs) 10:55, 6 December 2011 (UTC)
 * Failing per 7 day wait and comments made at the nominator's talk page which amount to a withdrawal. Once the issues have been fixed, feel free to nominate the article again - there is no minimum period for good faith nominations. Grandiose (me, talk, contribs) 14:34, 13 December 2011 (UTC)