Talk:Sibyl Hathaway/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Rosiestep (talk · contribs) 20:27, 1 March 2014 (UTC)

I'll review this one within the week. --Rosiestep (talk) 20:27, 1 March 2014 (UTC)
 * OK, thanks . Best, Mat  ty  .  007  20:32, 1 March 2014 (UTC)


 * Lead
 * "...but she kept the governmental reins in her hands" - clunky
 * Done. Mat  ty  .  007
 * Add maiden name per WP:FULLNAME
 * Done. Mat  ty  .  007


 * Early life
 * "She was born..." - I assume this refers to Sibyl but, grammatically, it refers to Sophie.
 * Done. Mat  ty  .  007
 * Please sort out William Frederick Collings vs. William Frederick vs. Frederick vs. Collings.
 * Done. I used Collings, as that is given as her maiden name in a source. Mat  ty  .  007
 * "the local Sercquiais dialect of Norman language" - the local Sercquiais dialect of the Norman language
 * Done. Mat  ty  .  007


 * First marriage
 * "When the Seigneur stormed aboard looking for her the captain hid her, she travelled to the house of a relative in London." clunky
 * Done. Mat  ty  .  007


 * Infobox
 * fine as is


 * Accession and remarriage
 * "Towards the end of his life, he stopped requesting the inhabitants to pay tithes..." - Towards the end of his life, he stopped requesting from the inhabitants the payment of tithes...
 * Done. Mat  ty  .  007
 * "She used the island's peculiarity" - can you clarify how it was peculiar?
 * Done. Mat  ty  .  007
 * "but the Chief Pleas refused to pass an ordinance that would forbid selling alcohol to anyone known to get too drunk." - drunk vs. too drunk?
 * Done. Mat  ty  .  007


 * Second World War
 * Fine as is, though I'm not convinced that the PROCLAMATION is necessary


 * Postwar years
 * "Once again widowed, Hathaway resumed complete authority over the island. In 1957, Queen Elizabeth II and the Duke of Edinburgh returned to Sark in what was the first time a reigning monarch had ever come to the island" - clunky
 * Done. Mat  ty  .  007
 * "On the 400th anniversary of Queen Elizabeth I's grant of charter to Sark's first seigneur" - what year was this?
 * Done. Mat  ty  .  007


 * Death
 * fine


 * References
 * Ref4 - What does the "P." stand for in Guernsey P.?
 * I would have said Guernsey Press. Mat  ty  .  007
 * Ref6, 7, 8, 9, 10, 11, 12, 13, 14 - None of these have an online presence?
 * 6 and 12 done, 7 nothing but Amazon, 8 nothing but Amazon and GBooks, 9 nothing (from now onwards nothing excludes Amazon, GBooks and Goodreads), nothing for any others


 * EL
 * fine


 * Images
 * All are Commons


 * Category
 * Place of birth missing - Isn't Guernsey sufficient?
 * Done, Mat  ty  .  007

I'm done with the review. Please ping me when you think you've finished. --Rosiestep (talk) 04:56, 5 March 2014 (UTC)
 * Thanks for the review, I have tried to fix all issues. Thanks, Mat  ty  .  007  18:57, 5 March 2014 (UTC)

GA review – see WP:WIAGA for criteria

Good job. Looks adequate for GA. --Rosiestep (talk) 03:30, 6 March 2014 (UTC)
 * 1) Is it reasonably well written?
 * A. Prose quality:
 * B. MoS compliance:
 * 1) Is it factually accurate and verifiable?
 * A. References to sources:
 * B. Citation of reliable sources where necessary:
 * C. No original research:
 * 1) Is it broad in its coverage?
 * A. Major aspects:
 * B. Focused:
 * 1) Is it neutral?
 * Fair representation without bias:
 * 1) Is it stable?
 * No edit wars, etc:
 * 1) Does it contain images to illustrate the topic?
 * A. Images are copyright tagged, and non-free images have fair use rationales:
 * B. Images are provided where possible and appropriate, with suitable captions:
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass or Fail:
 * I am a bit ashamed to see that Matty had to address all the issues by himself. My editing pattern has been a little, well, erratic these days. Thank you both! Surtsicna (talk) 16:13, 6 March 2014 (UTC)
 * Thanks for the review Rosiestep; Surtsicna, you wrote the article in the first place, well done! Thanks, Mat  ty  .  007  17:54, 6 March 2014 (UTC)