Talk:Siddhantasara/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Vami IV (talk · contribs) 22:28, 21 July 2020 (UTC)

Opening statement
Hello, and come what may from this review, thank you for your contributions to Wikipedia. During the review, I may make copyedits, which I will limit to spelling correction and minor changes to punctuation (removal of double spaces and such). I will only make substantive edits that change the flow and structure of the prose if I previously suggested and it is necessary. The Nominator(s) should understand that I am a grammar pedant, and I will nitpick in the interest of prose quality. For responding to my comments, please use ✅,, , ❌, , or , followed by any comment you'd like to make. I will be crossing out my comments as they are redressed, and only mine. A detailed, section-by-section review will follow. – ♠Vami _IV†♠  22:28, 21 July 2020 (UTC)

Prose

 * All three paragraphs of the lead start with the title. To mitigate this, I suggest merging the second and third sentences, as both discuss the book's reception.
 * Done --Gazal world (talk) 07:08, 22 July 2020 (UTC)


 * Mesmerism is a pseudoscience.
 * What can we do here ? Please guide me. --Gazal world (talk) 07:08, 22 July 2020 (UTC)
 * I recommend changing the "science" in based on the science of mesmerism to "pseudoscience", or delete it altogether. – ♠Vami _IV†♠  07:21, 22 July 2020 (UTC)
 * Done Removed the word 'science''. --Gazal world (talk) 07:48, 22 July 2020 (UTC)


 * Manilal's theological conclusions are that Āryāvarta is the source of all religions; [...] Could you add a few words to clarify that Āryāvarta refers to a historic region of the Indian subcontinent?
 * Done --Gazal world (talk) 07:08, 22 July 2020 (UTC)


 * The last sentence of the second paragraph of "Methodology" should be moved into "Reception and criticism", and germinated into its own paragraph if material on criticism is abundant enough.
 * Done --Gazal world (talk) 07:08, 22 July 2020 (UTC)


 * Hello . Thanks for your comments. I have addressed all the issues. Please see. --Gazal world (talk) 07:48, 22 July 2020 (UTC)
 * Excellent. I'll be passing this article now. – ♠Vami _IV†♠  07:52, 22 July 2020 (UTC)

GA progress
Images are relevant and free/tagged. – ♠Vami _IV†♠  22:28, 21 July 2020 (UTC)

Article passes copyvio scanners with a mere 5.7% likelihood. – ♠Vami _IV†♠  22:28, 21 July 2020 (UTC)

Article is stable, with no major edits in months. – ♠Vami _IV†♠  22:28, 21 July 2020 (UTC)