Talk:Sidney Crosby/GA1

GA Review
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 * GA review (see here for criteria)

Z enlax T C S 19:52, 28 May 2008 (UTC)
 * 1) It is reasonably well written.
 * a (prose): b (MoS):
 * 1) It is factually accurate and verifiable.
 * a (references): b (citations to reliable sources):  c (OR):
 * I've done everything except the captain thing, which I mentioned below. All the citations cover the relevant sentences.-Wafulz (talk) 20:20, 28 May 2008 (UTC)
 * 1) It is broad in its coverage.
 * a (major aspects): b (focused):
 * 1) It follows the neutral point of view policy.
 * Fair representation without bias:
 * 1) It is stable.
 * No edit wars etc.:
 * 1) It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.
 * a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail:
 * 1) It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.
 * a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail:
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail:


 * I don't see a problem with "built on rookie success." That's verifiable. I'm trying to fix whatever I can, but I don't agree with there being an issue with that sentence. Let me know what else I can do.  Enigma  message 19:57, 28 May 2008 (UTC)
 * It reads from a person's point-of-view. I guess it wouldn't hurt to leave it in the article. Z enlax  T C S 19:13, 29 May 2008 (UTC)


 * I'm not sure what you'd like for the captain thing. He hasn't drawn criticism for being named captain, although he did draw criticism for being named alternate captain in his rookie year. That's already in the article though. I'm working on the rest-Wafulz (talk) 20:06, 28 May 2008 (UTC)
 * What I was asking a direct quote from the individuals who criticized Crosby for becoming the captain for the Penguins. Z enlax  T C S 19:13, 29 May 2008 (UTC)
 * Like I said, I'm not aware of anyone criticizing him for becoming captain.-Wafulz (talk) 03:05, 2 June 2008 (UTC)
 * I threw in a Cherry quote about being an alternate captain, just in case that's what you meant.-Wafulz (talk) 19:23, 3 June 2008 (UTC)

2nd opinion
I saw the note at WP:GAN asking for someone else to take a look at the article, so I'm going to take over the review. Here are some suggestions for improvement:
 * "Upon his entry into the NHL, Crosby had the opportunity to play alongside Hall of Famer Mario Lemieux. Unfortunately, Lemieux was forced to retire after being diagnosed with an irregular heartbeat." - this part seems POV to me, try - "Upon his entry into the NHL, Crosby played alongside Hall of Famer Mario Lemieux, who was forced to retire after being diagnosed with an irregular heartbeat."
 * Fixed.


 * Watch for over wikilinking. Mario Lemieux is linked twice in the NHL career section. Make sure things are linked only once per section.
 * Fixed.


 * In International play, there is a date that needs to be wikilinked. It isn't necessary anymore to wikilink full dates, but an article should be consistent throughout.
 * Fixed.


 * The bulleted list in International play should just be converted to prose. It isn't a long enough list.
 * Fixed.


 * All the records need to be cited.
 * Fixed.


 * Can the tables in the awards be put into two columns? It would reduce white space.
 * I need some help with this.

I'll put the article on hold for seven days to allow for improvements. Nikki 311  02:01, 27 June 2008 (UTC)
 * Other than the tables, I've got it all set up.-Wafulz (talk) 13:24, 27 June 2008 (UTC)
 * I fixed that myself. Great work. I'll pass the article. Nikki  311  01:23, 28 June 2008 (UTC)