Talk:Siege of Carthage (Third Punic War)/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Harrias (talk · contribs) 20:20, 18 September 2020 (UTC)

I'll grab this one too. Harrias talk 20:20, 18 September 2020 (UTC)

Image

 * All images are appropriately tagged and captioned, though it is a bit odd that some have the caption centralised, and others don't.
 * All now centred.


 * File:Carthage location 2.png is a bit crap, I can probably throw an SVG together of that very easily if you want.
 * If it is not too much trouble, that would be great.

Prose review to follow. Harrias talk 20:47, 18 September 2020 (UTC)
 * Eugh, I though I had actually done the prose review on this already, I had it noted as being "on hold". Idiot. Will get to it. Harrias  talk 18:54, 28 September 2020 (UTC)
 * No worries. I am only just back from holiday and am struggling to catch up with RL and Wikipedia backlogs. Gog the Mild (talk) 19:07, 28 September 2020 (UTC)

Prose

 * Given that this battle involves Scipio Aemilianus, might it be worth quoting Goldsworthy: "His association with Scipio Aemilianus did result in a very favourable depiction of the role played by his relatives in the conflict.", or at least making it more explicit?
 * Very good point. No relatives involved in this siege. Tweaked to flag up favourable treatment of Aemilianus.


 * Could you blend notes 3 and 4; having them together but separate seems odd, and breaks up the text.
 * Good point. Done.


 * Lucius Censorius or Lucius Censorinus? You use both spellings. Our Wikipedia page is at Lucius Marcius Censorinus (consul 149 BC).
 * Censorinus. (Thumb finger followed by cut and paste.) Fixed.


 * "Our sources have Scipio.." Really, "Our sources"?
 * 'My'? OK, 'The primary'. (Not sure what happened there.)


 * "evocation" either needs a template, or no italics at all.
 * Done.


 * for "agnomen".
 * Done.


 * "The formally Carthaginian territories.." formally or formerly? (Could conceivably be either, just checking you intended what you wrote.)
 * Nah. Thanks. Either my spellchecker or illiteracy.

Hmm, that seems to be less than usual: either I'm getting sloppy, or you're getting good at this! Anyway, that seems to be the lot, I'll stick it on hold. Harrias talk 11:55, 29 September 2020 (UTC)


 * I think that I am adding the things you routinely check to my pre-nom list. If I had remembered to add check lang templates - which I should - you would have had almost nothing in the prose. Gog the Mild (talk) 13:13, 29 September 2020 (UTC)


 * And I think that that is everything done. Many thanks for picking this one up. (No response from SV, despite my pinging. I am unsure how to handle that.) Gog the Mild (talk) 13:22, 29 September 2020 (UTC)
 * Great, this easily passes the GA criteria now. I'll sort the image out when I get a chance: I've got too many windows and tabs open at the moment for my computer to want to do much of anything. Good luck with SV! Did I mention that I got a new job? Start on Thursday, so I might go quiet for a bit while I get to grips with it. Harrias  talk 15:02, 29 September 2020 (UTC)