Talk:Siege of Ngatapa/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: GhostRiver (talk · contribs) 00:20, 10 October 2021 (UTC)

I can take a look at this! —  Ghost River  00:20, 10 October 2021 (UTC)

Infobox and lede

 * "thought was inaccessible" "believed to be inaccessible"
 * Done. Zawed (talk) 02:46, 10 October 2021 (UTC)

Background

 * "Māori" is missing the necessary diacritic in the second sentence
 * Thought I had gotten all of these. Zawed (talk) 02:46, 10 October 2021 (UTC)


 * "and without a trial, in early 1866, was exiled to" "and in early 1866 was exiled without a trial to"
 * Done. Zawed (talk) 02:46, 10 October 2021 (UTC)


 * "well armed having secured weapons from" "well-armed with weapons secured from"
 * Done. Zawed (talk) 02:46, 10 October 2021 (UTC)


 * "Te Kooti; it offered" "Te Kooti, offering"
 * Done. Zawed (talk) 02:46, 10 October 2021 (UTC)


 * "surrendering their arms" "a surrender of arms"
 * Done. Zawed (talk) 02:46, 10 October 2021 (UTC)


 * "Among those killed was" "Among those killed were"
 * Done. Zawed (talk) 02:46, 10 October 2021 (UTC)

Prelude

 * Diacritics missing on "Ringatū" in the sentence beginning "They attacked Makeretu"
 * Fixed. Zawed (talk) 02:46, 10 October 2021 (UTC)


 * Comma after "wanted to execute some of the prisoners"
 * Done. Zawed (talk) 02:46, 10 October 2021 (UTC)

Ngatapa

 * "An elongate" "An elongated"
 * Done. Zawed (talk) 02:46, 10 October 2021 (UTC)

Siege

 * Not a deal-breaker, but consider breaking this up into subheads for each stage of the siege
 * I have added a couple, what do you think? Zawed (talk) 03:13, 10 October 2021 (UTC)


 * Comma after "Ropata requested some be brought up"
 * Done. Zawed (talk) 03:07, 10 October 2021 (UTC)


 * Comma after "following the engagement there"
 * Done. Zawed (talk) 03:07, 10 October 2021 (UTC)


 * Comma after "lightning raid into Poverty Bay"
 * Looking at this one again, it was quite a long sentence so I opted to break it at this point instead. Zawed (talk) 03:07, 10 October 2021 (UTC)

Aftermath

 * "subsequently executed in the subsequent pursuit" drop one of the "subsequent"s
 * Done. Zawed (talk) 03:13, 10 October 2021 (UTC)


 * "in Poverty Bay was a breach" "in Poverty Bay were a breach" (subject/verb agreement with "actions")
 * Done. Zawed (talk) 03:13, 10 October 2021 (UTC)

General comments

 * Photos are relevant and public domain
 * No stability concerns in the revision history
 * Earwig score looks good

Only very minor prose things! Putting on hold for now, and feel free to ping if there are any questions. —  Ghost River  00:36, 10 October 2021 (UTC)
 * , thank you for your time in reviewing the article, it is greatly appreciated. I have responded to your feedback with edits to the article and the comments above. Thanks again, Zawed (talk) 03:15, 10 October 2021 (UTC)
 * Everything looks good on my end now, and I think the subheads on the Siege section look good. Happy to pass! —  Ghost River  14:34, 10 October 2021 (UTC)