Talk:Silent Parade/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Jackyd101 (talk · contribs) 10:06, 28 October 2017 (UTC)

Hi there, I have reviewed this article against the good article criteria and although I am not quite prepared to pass the article for GA immediately, I don't think there is a long way to go. I have listed below the principle problems which prevent this article from achieving GA status - my main concerns are a few underdeveloped points and some awkward prose.

The article now has seven days to address these issues, and should the contributors disagree with my comments then please indicate below why you disagree and suggest a solution, compromise or explanation. Further time will be granted if a concerted effort is being made to address the problems, and as long as somebody is genuinely trying to deal with the issues raised then I will not fail the article.

Please do not take offence at anything I have said, nothing is meant personally and maliciously and if anyone feels aggrieved then please notify me at once and I will attempt to clarify the comments in question. Finally, should anyone disagree with my review or eventual decision then please take the article to WP:GAR to allow a wider selection of editors to comment on the issues discussed here. Well done on the work so far.--Jackyd101 (talk) 10:06, 28 October 2017 (UTC)


 * This is a warning - no work has taken place on this article since I left the review 11 days ago. If no body commits here to fixing the problems in this article, which are not huge, but are large enough to prevent passing the article in its current state, then I will be forced to fail it, which would be a shame. The deadline is 15th November. If there is no action by then, the article will fail.--Jackyd101 (talk) 23:56, 9 November 2017 (UTC)


 * OK, sorry. I don't want to fail this article, but with a complete lack of attention or notice on the part of the reviewers, I'm left with no other choice.--Jackyd101 (talk) 20:28, 16 November 2017 (UTC)

Issues preventing promotion

 * It is reasonably well written.
 * a (prose): b (MoS):
 * The lede needs work - Can there be some discussion of the consequences of the march and its relation to the wider civil rights movement?
 * Infobox "Black people deaths during the East St. Louis riots" - awkward phrasing. Try "Deaths of black people . . ."
 * "Tensions in East St. Louis, Illinois, were brewing between white and black workers. Many black workers had found work in the local industry." Join these sentences together.
 * "Rumors of black men and white women fraternizing began to circulate, exacerbating tensions." - this isn't encyclopedic writing. Try "The situation exploded after rumors of black men and white women fraternizing began to circulate"
 * "contributed to the responsive measures taken by some African Americans in St. Louis and the nation" - surely it provoked those responses, rather than contributed to them?
 * "were tapped to serve as the executives for the parade" - What does tapped mean in this context?
 * "The Silent Parade evoked empathy by Jewish people who remembered pogroms against them" it should be "evoked empathy from Jewish people" and the "against them" is redundant and can be removed.


 * It is factually accurate and verifiable.
 * "Prior to May of 1917, there began a migration of blacks fleeing threats to life and liberty in the South." - This is over simplified. The economic concerns were equally as important and are directly relevant to what follows. Expand this a little bit to encompass these reasons.


 * a (references): b (citations to reliable sources):  c (OR):
 * It is broad in its coverage.
 * a (major aspects): b (focused):
 * "Thousands of white men descended on East St. Louis" - were they local white men or white men who traveled to the city from elsewhere?
 * "was little "possibility of the United States ever permitting black people to enjoy full citizenship, equal rights and dignity."" - this is an opinion. Who said this?
 * "Organizers and leadership" doesn't need it's own section. Put the text and quote up into the planning section with the other discussion of organisers.
 * "Wilson did not do so and repudiated his promises." - expand on this, how exactly did he repudiate his promises?
 * "would not grant access due to Trump Tower being located there" - explain that this was due to security issues relating to President Trump (it may not be obvious to someone years down the line why the presence of Trump Tower was such an obstacle).


 * It follows the neutral point of view policy.
 * a (fair representation): b (all significant views):
 * It is stable.
 * It contains images, where possible, to illustrate the topic.
 * a (tagged and captioned): b (lack of images does not in itself exclude GA):  c (non-free images have fair use rationales):
 * Overall:
 * a Pass/Fail:
 * a Pass/Fail: